JabberHut

Hello, 3B! Here on your request (and on curiosity of mine). Let's see what you have here...:twisted: The gloom hung in the wintry day, when the snow fell, and my ...

Hey, Errant! Ooh, no one posted? Fun times. I get first dibs. :twisted: The radio fell silent as a small explosion in the distance rocked the log cabin and [s]awaking[/s] ...

Lindsay, my friend! *hugs* Let's see what you have here. :D Right off the bat, the first paragraph has a serious repetition issue. Lol, I think Rieda caught it. However, ...

Razor! May I have your permission to read your work? Well, I'll take that as a yes. ^_^ The Neanderthal, should-have-graduated-two-years-ago student , sat down in his seat, grinning stupidly ...

Hello, my gray friend. Let's see what you have "whipped up" for us today. :wink: ...he had found the nearest pointy object in his lunchbag; a knife. I'd use a ...

Hey, Pal! I read the article in wiki and would like to read this. *reads* And nestled is her head in the warmth of her hands, That were cold on ...

Alright, let's see what we have here. :twisted: It’s the day that is often regarded as the best of the school week, if only because [s]if signals[/s] it signaled the ...

Nutty! I'm-a-crittin'! And I'm on a role! :twisted: But, seriously, if you don't like my crit, you can destroy me in chat. :wink: It was more a strip of course ...

Here's your second crit, my dear friend. ^_^ phone calls had already been [s]phoned[/s] made ,... Sounds better than the repetition of "phone." ^_^ ...and contacts had already been contacted ...

Hey, Audy! Let’s see what you have here…I usually read while I crit. Sometimes I’ll comment on something, but later on I’ll find the answer and say so. Lol, it’s ...

I'm interested in your story! ^_^ I think your idea for Moon Children and Sky is wonderful! I think the characters are fine. Especially in such a small group of ...

Heylo! ^_^ The young girl’s mother rushed to the scene, trying to get her to shut up and take the photo. No mother would tell her daughter to 'shut-up'. She'd ...

I never really crit lyrics and stuff, but I saw this. It's really good, it made me laugh! :lol: I'm more of a grammar geek, btw. There's be some punctuation ...

Here to crit. ^_^ I gazed down at the brightly lit underground city from my perch on the top of an apartment building. I gazed down at the brightly lit ...

Hey, Gladius! Since my brother is leaving my alone finally, I can review your work. ^_^ longer than her counterpart , Din. glancing guardedly around for signs of more monsters ...