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Alrighty, let's see what I can do here...:twisted: Every by-stander [Bystander--one word ^^] watched, [Delete comma] as beauty was spread through out the room. A crowd formed as she continued ...

Hey, Alice! Thanks for tearing up my horrible chapter 1. :wink: It sooo needed and I will post the rewrite very soon. However, in return for that never-ending critique, I ...

Hey, Alanna! I haven't talked to you in ages! Mind if I look at your story? :D Didn't think so. :P The sun rises on mount Olympus and Athena stirs ...

Alrighty, let's see what I can do for you, Bella, my friend. ^_^ Sadly , he didn't love her, he only liked the chase. I think a double dash (--) ...

Hello, good person! :D Thought I'd stop by and see what wonderful story you are willing to share with us. :D :twisted: Amber didn’t have much luck convincing Violet that ...

Hey, Syd! It's been a while since I've visited your work, which is really surprising. I like your writing. Let's see what's left for me to nitpick...:twisted: I’ve always felt ...

Hey, Ash! Let's see what happens next! :D Hehehe...:twisted: Lethero sat on a branch of a tree at the entrance of the base to the Moon Rider’s base as two ...

Hey, Mad! Let's see what I have here...:twisted: "Get up Tom!' Screeched my grandmother, the smell of her smoldering cigarette burning my nostrils. "Screeched" should be lowercased here since it ...

Hello! I wasn't going to do a full-out crit because Aet did a fairly good job with his. However, I read this: Pay attention to Aet's crit and maybe mine ...

Hey, Ash! I'd be more than happy to read this! :D *ignores blank thank you cards next to her* Lethero was twenty when Orlam was born and as Orlam grew ...

Hey, Goth. ^_^ Thought I'd stop by to take a peek at your writing. My parents were out on the town. Were they: ...out in town. Or ...out of town. ...

Alright, I finally have a little time to crit this. Let's see if I find anything no one caught yet. :lol: There were sayings for every occasion, every place , ...

Hey, Ash! Sweet, I get first dibs! :twisted: The sun shown bright on the mid-afternoon day of Topisk. “A young male, very strong, too. Replace the first comma with the ...

Hello, Phoebe, my friend! Sweet, I'm the first poster! I get first dibs! :twisted: I’ve always been a cautious lover, more justice than fortune, with an eye to the scales. ...

Alrighty, Rea. Let's see what you have presented with us. *reads* I miss you alot As I remember That moment . You were only 18 -- Brand new license , ...