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Hey! You spelled my name wrong! Haha, glad I forced you to write this. :wink: But you're supposed to PM me when you do, remember? Nit-Picks Oh , God, please ...

Hey Jared! So, you PMed me about this piece a while ago…four days ago, in fact. It definitely looks interesting, so I’m glad you did. I wanted to apologize for ...

Hello! You asked for a critique, so here it is! Nit-Picks Listen, my love, I have a story to tell. One with bloodthirsty creatures from hell. With war, with famine, ...

Ugrh. No wonder you have no reviews – this is over 3,000 words! I usually consider 500 too much, haha. (I’m lazy. ;) ) Anyways, don’t expect this to be ...

Hello, Conrad Rice! I’m so sorry! When you first asked for the review, I checked it out and realized I didn’t have enough time for such a long piece. Then ...

Hello, scasha. Haven’t seen you around before – what’s up? J Anyways, I saw this a while ago, and the title definitely grabbed my attention – kudos to you. (I’ll ...

I agree - this is too short to critique fully. A quick comment before I begin - either I can't count, or this was six sentences exactly. You should submit ...

Hello again. To save space, pages one and two are in the first column, three and four in the next. Highlighted Comments 1. This really bothers me. I loved the ...

Aw, it's all over? Anyways, I'm too lazy to do a normal critique, so here it goes! Boring old quotes! Nit-Picks Smirking, I walked out of Chad’s house, lugging my ...

I'm baaack! :lol: The rest didn't have any comments. Highlighted Comments 1. Dash instead. 2. Reword, a lot. Maybe show Steven stand up from leaning? And no ‘now’ – it’s ...

*Poke* Short much? Haha, I love it – the shorter the better! (Heehee, I’m lazy…) Anyways, on to the critique! Highlighted Comments 1. Show us instead. Also, don’t say ‘just ...

I'm back! :lol: One Nit-Pick: Yes, yes, everything’s fine, said Galen weakly, but deeply. Urgh; don’t use ‘ly’ words! Especially not two in a row. Overall Fantasy I’m not sure ...

Hello again! Nit-Picks “Here are your keycards,” said Mom after she and Dad talked to the man behind the counter. She handed Joe one and me one. “Rebecca, don't leave ...

Hey Jared! What up me home boy? *Cough* A lame attempt to be cool right there… Anyways, here’s my critique, as per request. I told you it wouldn’t be helpful, ...

*Points to choco* Look to her for nit-picks. I actually just stumbled across this and wasn't planning on critiquing, so I wasn't looking - at all. You got me hooked, ...