JC

lol...interesting.

I tried writing it from a really young perspective, so it was kind-of supposed to be scatterbrained.

haha, it's not the last chapter...there's so much more to come...Thanks though Lainna.

She started writing was the suprise...but nobody really caught it...mostly because I forgot to mention it...I'm going to go back and fix some things so it's clear how important writing ...

Okay, I'm back. Chapters 6,7 These are both good, I couldn't find many mistakes. So, yeah. I read these a few day's ago, but I couldn't post what I had ...

Yeah, PM me for the next chapter =D -JC

Laura Wiess

Hey Clau. Everybody else already pointed out the few things. I just felt like posting on it...so... Good job. (You'll get more of my thoughts on it later, kk?) See ...

he has a name, but they dont sa it... (his name's Osiris by the way.)

Ah...that makes much more sense then =D *blushes* Sorry.

I can't tell you ;D

Well, it would seem that it's all already been taken care of eh? That blows, but hey, it's work off my load right? Anyways it's really sweet, in the est ...

That was wonderfully creepy...too true...and just...kind of...eww.... Good job though. Nothing to critique.

Hmmm...Chill out, nobody's gonna code...I like it =D lol Anyways, thanks for pointing out all the repeats! I forgot to read it over before posting *bad JC!* and I'll be ...

Ah yes! I'm going to expand on what razorblade said, (I was supposed to put it in mine, but I forgot :O) The fun thing about third person is that ...