Insomnia

Hey, Jab. Here's my late crit (again). ;) I looked up at my dad who was only a head taller than I. This needs a comma after "dad," as otherwise ...

Hey, BroadwayGirl. I noticed that you're new-ish, so I thought I'd give you a critique. Sorry if I repeat some of what Ayra's said. I try not to read other ...

Hey, Sam. Yes, this is going to be one of those critiques that every writer dreads: the hollow ones. I've read it over a couple of times now. I'm going ...

Eep, Sorry, Jab. :( I haven't been checking my PMs, and I just found a heap. xD Anyway, on to the story. Even if Gladius already ruined all the fun. ...

Hey, Jabber. Sorry if this crit is late. I've been a little... side tracked. :P I think Gladius picked up most things, but I'll dig for some more. ;) Dad ...

Hey, Rieda. I've been waiting for this. Inspired title, by the way. The chicken was judging me. ...That may be the best opening line I have read in a long ...

Hey, BBB. :D I heard you talking about this in the chat and had to read it. xD At least now there's someone else trying to bring horror back? :P ...

Hey, Jabber. You got the second piece up fast. Hopefully you can get the third one up by tomorrow. ;) “Your girlfriend wrapped the figurine in the same glossy paper ...

Hey, Prok. :) Petite coughs could be heard up and down the queue, Never heard a cough described as "petite" before. I suppose it works, but it bothers me a ...

Hey, Nick. :) This was a fairly good piece. It had a few mistakes, but that's not bad for someone who's out of the habit! :D Hilary fought a battle ...

Well, I was looking for your prologue and I found this, so oh well. ;) “Who’s present is next, Teddy?” *Whose. Who's means who is. “Susie, no,” Mom said sternly, ...

Hey, Andy. You asked me for a crit, so this is it. Hopefully you've got a couple of typos, otherwise it won't be very long. ;) said Bellamy placing a ...

Hey. :D I guess I promised, so here I am. ;) It was more a strip of course cotton, Should that be coarse? but wrinkles spanned from her eyes 'spanned ...

Hey, Luc. I know this an old piece, but it'd on the first page now, so it's fair game. ;) I stepped inside the suite. I shut the door Watch ...

Aww. -hugs- xD This was horrible to read, and not because it was badly written, or anything like that. It was horrible because this is happening to someone I feel ...