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Re: An empty desk
This was beautiful, heartfelt and full of palpable emotions, I could feel them jumping off the page at me. I feel your pain, in the past two years my school ...
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Re: Princess Of The Sand Castle
Just because it is a poem doesn't mean it doesn't have to have punctuation! Ellipses area all fine and dandy, but commas and periods are lovely. Oh and I liked ...
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Re: My Metaphor
Well, it was all over the place, and I can't decide if that's good or bad. Not a bad effort, not a masterpiece, but I wouldn't count it as a ...
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Re: Wake up
Just because it's a poem, doesn't mean it doesn't need to have punctuation!!!!!! Oh, and the rhythm was a tiny bit... well a little more than a tiny bit off ...
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Re: Stooge
This was beautiful, I know a lot of people that absolutely can't filter their words, and at times I',m included in that group, and this poem completely described those moments, ...
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Re: Soul of a Warrior
Well, I'm not going to throw out a long response like to one above because they pretty much covered everything. At this moment I'm listening to Mumford and Sons' - ...
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Re: Honestly Ugly
Well, I can't really point out anything that hasn't been pointed out yet. But, well... maybe split the lines up into stanzas, it's good like this, but it was a ...
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Re: Stand Up
I loved it. I felt the emotion in all of the lines, and well... I dont know what else to say. It was good, but the lines were off-kilt, they ...
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Re: Myriad maze
It was great, I agree with it 100%. Great job, I totally loved it. A few changes I would make: To write a tale with heart and soul, to find ...
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Re: Toy Soldier
Great poem, but when I was reading it some of the lines were uneven, and it messed the flow up a little, because some had more syllables than others and ...
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Re: Mermaids
It was good, just in a few places the lines didn't seem to balance. you're lucky to live When the oceans have died. These two lines here don't really make ...
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Re: A Atheists Point Of View
"A fool says in his heart there is no God." -Psalm 14:3. I was always sketchy on this entire religion thing too. And my parents are HUUUUUGEEEEEE Christians, but what ...
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Re: Deadly Heat!
Haha! This was great! So lighthearted and, well... just epic. Good poem, I liked it.... a lot. I absolutely adore summer, but the heat does suck sometimes. The best line ...
Jun 5, 2011 -
Re: Beneath the Smile
I am going to use my favorite phrase, possibly overused by me, but it soooo applies in this case. This poem was legen...... wait for it....... dary!!!!!! I feel the ...
Jun 5, 2011 -
Re: For the Boy Who Sits In Front of Me in Science
Awhhhhhhh. After reading this I want to punch someone in the face. It was beautiful, I absolutely enjoyed it. Somethign you could fix: You sat next to me durring an ...
Jun 5, 2011
