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Hello there. ^_^ It's Hawkie, and I'll be reviewing you today. 1, 2, 3. 1, 2, 3. The first sentence of your story needs to be riveting, foreshadowing, unique, so ...

Hello, teammate! Looks like I'm _finally_ getting around to reviewing you. ^^ i. Nitpicks A plume of smoke rose from the dish, lingering in the atmosphere like a volcano’s smoke. ...

Hello, teammate! Time for a serious review! :P Thanks for the one on Wolf Girl, by the way. It was extremely helpful. Okay, so here goes. Nit-picks! (My favorite part, ...

Heylo. ^^ I'm Hawkie and it looks like I'll be your first review! I'm honored. ^^ Let's get down to business, shall we? I'm going to be completely honest with ...

Hi there. ^^ Maya, huh? That's a pretteh name. I'm Hawkie, and I'll be reviewing you today. Overall I liked this, but I think it could use a little fixing ...

Hi! I'm Hawkie, your teammate for the reality show, and I'll be reviewing you. ^^ You already have a lot of reviews but I'm going to do one anyway. xP ...

Hi! ^^ I'm Hawkie and I'll be reviewing you today. I find myself staring again, I quickly avert my gaze. I think this would work better as "I find myself ...

Hello! I'm Hawkie, and I'll be reviewing you today. ^^ So, without further ado: The cool, smooth fabric slipped through my busy fingers as I fumbled through the line of ...

Oh, Sophia! How beautiful! This was very well written; I found very few mistakes, and I think the above review covers most of them. However . . . She could ...

Hi there. ^^ I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. I. Nit-picks "Aimee! "We're going to be late!" Why the two quotation marks? I decided to get in the ...

Wow, Nixon. This is a really odd poem. I'm not sure quite what to say. Forgive me for asking, but what's it about? I don't understand it. It's definitely intriguing, ...

Wow! This is really good, style-wise. I found no spelling or grammar errors, and it all flowed really nicely. However, I don't really get exactly what the song is about. ...

Welcome to YWS, Mrob! Here's your review. I. Nit-picking: The sparsely wooded area in which they walked gave no indication of being ventured upon before. Yet the intent with which ...

Hello, hello, I'm Hawkie and I'm here to review you, so without further ado: A girl without a father is like a book without covers. That's one great hook, and ...

Hello, hello, mes amis, welcome to YWS! As for your piece. It's very short so there's not much to say about it. However . . . My name is Calvin ...