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Hello, LiaLia! IronSpark here. I just wanted to give some overall thoughts here. I think that this poem is good, but some of the rhymes are very forced. Why did ...

Heya, WindSailor. IronSpark here for a really (and I mean really) quick review. Here we go... Wow, this is great. I was just wondering if you could use a bit ...

Hello, MarbleToast! IronSpark here. I don't have much time, so I'm going to just say two general things: Good job with your description! I like how you used "baby blue", ...

Comment: Hello, Defyingravity01! IronSpark here. I only have two things. 1. "Even as I dress differently,/even as my acne just begins to clear up./Even as I put effort into/losing weight./I'm ...

Hello, Kelpies! IronSpark here. So here are my nitpicks: 1. Sometimes you double space after periods, sometimes you don't. It has to be consistent. 2. You say "And then we ...

Hello, TheCardsHaveNoMemory (great username, by the way)! I'm just gonna nitpick a bit, if that's okay with you. Heeeeerrrrreeee we go... :D 1. Why is everything capitalized after the comma? ...

Hello there! IronSpark here. Because (unfortunately) I don't have a lot of time, I'm just going to cover some general points. I like your use of imagery and voice. However, ...

Hello there! IronSpark here for another review. This is an intense poem. I especially like the lines "Dragging itself across/The vault of the heavens," However, some of your punctuation and ...

Hello there. IronSpark here. Um... okay. So you seem to like writing "funny" things, which seem to sometimes be a waste of time. Anyway, this was kind of funny. But ...

This is kind of funny, but I'm sorry--this shouldn't be on Literary Spotlight... Also, the title's incorrect. It should be: "How do you Fool Innocent People Online?" or "How to ...

Hello! Sorry that this is such a short review. This is a beautiful poem. The image especially added to it. Below, @miley said that she suggested that the poem had ...

Hello there! This is IronSpark. Sorry that this is so short... this piece is just so good, I didn't have much to critique. This is great! I loved your imagery--the ...

Hello! IronSpark here. So this is what happened when I tried to review your piece: Hello! IronSpark here. Okay... so... I'm just gonna nitpick around a bit. Because this is ...

Hello there! IronSpark here. As I usually do with poetry (and basically everything) I'm going to nitpick a little. Well, a lot. Here we go... 1. Why did you decide ...

Hello there! I'm just gonna nitpick a bit, so bear with me. Sorry if some of these are out of order. Okay, here we go... 1. "Tick tok in the ...