Hannah

What I liked best about this poem was that it made me want more details. I wanted to know a little more about the motivation behind each character. I thought ...

Hi, there! This story is awesome. I was really intrigued by the title, and I wasn't at all disappointed, because that iron and coppers is the only thing that makes ...

Hi, there! I enjoyed this story, but there are a few suggestions I have that might make it read smoother. First of all, I love the base idea of this ...

Hello! So I noticed at the beginning you mentioned there are some cultural references and to not be tripped up by them, so I just wanted to comment on a ...

Hey there! So first of all I have to say I haven't seen a single episode of Friday Night Dinner. BUT I think that might prove to be useful to ...

Hey there! So the first thing I'd want to suggest would be taking out ALL of those paragraphs of Felix thinking by himself before Alex arrives. It's boring! I mean, ...

Hey, I read your comment at the bottom of the page and I'm glad I did, because that's exactly what I was noticing throughout this whole chapter. I was going ...

Did you think I wouldn't notice you'd posted a new chapter? ;) You should PM me or let me know on my wall when you do! Unless you're secretly tired ...

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Okay, this it not a review yet, but I am so glad that you shared this piece. I remember struggling a lot with being able to have sex for the ...

Hey there! So, I really like the basis of this poem. I think for many of us, especially with the way you described each person based only on their flaws ...

Hey, Kyllorac. I am not sure, but judging by your author's note, this seems to be an experiment purely in bleeding lines? There are some nice ones. "I wonder if ...

Hey, Dark. I didn't think I'd do any reviews this review day, and I wanted to sleep like twenty minutes ago, but I saw you had a new chapter up ...

Hey, dark! Didn't think you could post a chapter without getting a review from me, did you? So, looking back at this chapter, nothing much really happens. At the same ...

Hey there! Here as requested and already planned, haha~ So, from first impressions, I don't know what this poem is about. I feel like maybe this is a poem about ...

Hmmm. I do like your voice. I like that you have the instinct to keep it simple, but also bring a little of the character's personality into their narration. I ...