Halycon

Top 5 (in no particular order) 1. Dune by Frank Herbert- just finished this last week and I absolutley loved it. The first 30 pages or so were a bit ...

I assume this is about long distance running eh? in that case I can relate to this as I used to do cross country runnning and I know exactly the ...

Hey, I enjoyed this poem, It was really nice, short sweet and simple. if I were you I would try and spice it up a bit using some more adjectives ...

Pretty good in general :D few little things Into a corpse of decay this line sounds slightly off in terms of flow compared to the last stanza I would change ...

This poem was really good but I felt you left it hanging slightly. maybe just write write one more line of some sort or swap the last two lines around. ...

I actually quite enjoyed reading this poem. the rhyming scheme seemed a little annoying at frst but the fact you don't use it on every line and the lines have ...

This poem isn't bad, but it could be improved I watch the tiny people Smaller then ant people I want cut out the "people in the second line of this, ...

I quite enjoyed this poem. it is simple yet powerful "sings of victory" I think this should be "signs of victory" But apart from that I can't realy see much ...

This poem is by no means bad but you could have done it better. for a start you re-use the word sun too much within the poem, try and think ...

I liked your poem overall but there a few things that you could do better The chaos that's yet to come Will leave it's mark in the sky. These two ...

This sounds pretty good. few little things "no mouse bat wants to be eaten." I would just have it as "no bat wants to be eaten" I can't really find ...

This sounds really good. It kinda reminds me of the Silverwing, Sunwing, Firewing series which was also written form the perpective of bats. You wouldn't have happened to read any ...

Your poetry is amazing and this one is no different, though it it isn't one of my favourites Feel free to ignore me because you probably know 10 times more ...

This is my first review so forgive me if I talk rubbish xD I really like this, its short, sweet and simple whcih works for the poem . I especially ...