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Re: Unforgiving (Tumblr Prompted)
Hello :) I'm here to read your story! The small village that was carefully tucked into a forest began its daily routine of preparing for nightfall -- they were primitive, ...
Jan 6, 2018 -
Re: Magician's Wars Chapter 1
I stopped to catch my breath, bending over with my hands on my knees while I felt the cold hair stinging my lungs. And yet proceeds - seconds later - ...
Jan 6, 2018 -
Re: Budgie's Death Now Being Treated as Suspicious
Hello! Thomas here :) I really liked the intro, dropped me/the readers right into the action/argument. The dialogue between all of your characters too was great, very believable. I actually ...
Oct 9, 2016 -
Re: Bundle of Flowers ~ Chapter 5
Hello! Thomas here :) First off I must say I really enjoyed your story, it was a very interesting and intriguing read, though I think you could improve the dialogue ...
Oct 9, 2016 -
Re: The Plan (intro)
Hello! Thomas here. I don't think i should make any criticisms about the story because I would only be repeating those below me, so i will just tell you what ...
Oct 9, 2016 -
Re: Checkmate
That. Was. Epic. I must say, very well written and extremely intriguing, too. The gaps between each sentence fit really well, gave it a certain anticipation. Very nicely done. I ...
Oct 9, 2016 -
Re: The Myth of Kampung Tropika
Hello :) Thomas here. Wow, that ending was spooky, nicely done! I agree with what EverWinter said below, especially the description of the ghost, i wanted to know more about ...
Oct 6, 2016 -
Re: Homerise
Hello! Thomas here! I really like what you have done! I have never tried flash fiction nor was i planning to but you make it look extremely appealing, so i ...
Oct 6, 2016 -
Re: The Last Bridge - Prologue
Hello :) Thomas here. I finally found a LoL fanfic on YWS, yay! I found what you have done very relatable and very cool! Really enjoyed the story. I found ...
Oct 6, 2016 -
Re: The Fighter of Aldea - Chapter 1 - RE-REVISED
Hello! Thomas here for a review! There are quite a few reviews now so i feel i would only be repeating everyone else, so i shall just talk about what ...
Oct 6, 2016 -
Re: Heroes of Aldrizhon (Chapter 7)
Hello! Thomas here. This was definitely an enjoyable read. I like the concept of it all. This is the first chapter i have read out of your series so far, ...
Sep 10, 2016 -
Re: -Gravedigger-
Greetings! Thomas here to JUDGE you, i mean, review what you have done! :D I must say, i have never been one for reading poems, but what you have done ...
Sep 10, 2016 -
Re: The Grimm:End Of time Chapter 2
Greetings! Thomas here. This is certainly an interesting chapter. It is full of good dialogue and plot, yet it is quite hard to follow due to your paragraph/sentence structure and ...
Sep 10, 2016
