GryphonFledgling

First, you should totally read Inkheart . Great, great stuff. Second, I kinda like this idea. Very Farenheit 51 . Third, I like the voice of the character, especially in ...

The *like* button does little to express the sheer amount of squee this piece brought me. But I click it anyway. This sounds like the inside of my brain. For ...

Hey oh! Review time! I liked the character's voice in this. She had a bit of spark, a bit of humor, even as she was dealing with horrible circumstances. It's ...

It felt as though daggers where cutting deep into his side as he attempted to breath deeply. He lay on the ground, breathing painfully while he stared at the blue ...

Nice. I'm intrigued. The description and explanations were nice, but just as a warning, too much of it can come across as unpleasant infodumping. You don't have too much of ...

'Allo, 'allo! I liked this little scene, but I do think that as a story, it needs a little more. If nothing else, just a bit more information about what's ...

a grand staircase. They were made out of the rich oak I'm assuming by "they", you mean the stairs. But you've only talked about a singular staircase as of yet. ...

So I'm assuming her dad knows about her abilites? How does he know? Did she tell him? Does he treat her differently because of it? How does he treat her, ...

I love the potential in this story. I love the way your character instantly brands her father as evil. I love how matter-of-fact she is throughout her narration. It is ...

All right, love, I'm confused now. It bounces its face against the lip of the first step Make it clear that you're talking about the tire here. There's no mention ...

Pink's done the nitpicky stuff. On to some big-picture observations! I was a bit confused about the setting here. It seems like it's normal, then it has an animate tire, ...

First of all, *like*. Ahem, now that's out of the way and I can move on to reviewing... It's probably really telling about my fanbase tendancies where when I read ...

Ooh, Beauty and the Beast retelling! Yayz! First off: You've got chapters here, why not try out the spiffy novel feature? 'Tis cool stuff and it keeps you from having ...

Overall, I felt like I didn't get to know Jonas. Can we get some more information on him? Like, maybe have some characters talk about him to give us something ...

Hey hi! This was interesting. You started after the break up and so the characters already have a lot of history. I wanna see how this is going to go ...