Griffinkeeper

Monster's is entitled to his opinion and may express it in the manner of his choosing, provided that he follows the YWS rules. While the critique was harsh, it was ...

I think you may have lost some focus here. The idea isn't to critique the author or their personal views. Instead, it is to examine the article and judge the ...

It doesn't really show off your writing skills or technique, but that doesn't mean it isn't a fun piece to read anyway.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. It is YWS Fan-fiction, which means that it involves the characterizations of various YWS members in a fictional space environment.

Your caps lock key is broken!

Make sure to add this to the list of YWS Fan-fictions.

I think that your formatting may have encountered some problems. So I've gone through and reformatted it. The results are below. Alya stared down a long, broad throne room torpidly. ...

The work is a series of unconnected scenes and characters. It doesn't make any sense at all. There is no theme, no message, and no plot. You have written words, ...

It is utter garbage, only because you haven't gone through and refined it via the editing process. My advice never involves a cessation of writing, only how what you've written ...

Thanks for the catches! I did break apart the names to make them more reader-friendly. The emoticon220 part was an oversight. I've added more detail of their energy spike investigation, ...

I don't think it's talent so much as experience. I've been writing creatively for at least eight years now. It just takes a lot of practice and attention to detail.

I'll keep writing then!

I always have a problem with its vs. it's. I know the difference, but it still happens anyway. The missing quotation mark is actually right above in the previous paragraph. ...

If the space terms are unfamiliar, it is probably because I'm making a lot of them up on the spot. So, don't be afraid.

I feel like I've been issued a challenge!