Griffinkeeper

Hey Snoink! Thanks for the review! The problem with making Lorelei younger is that I need her to be able to handle professional activities. Learning magic takes years of training, ...

Hey Silk! Thanks for the review, it yielded some really good feedback. Like, I felt this idea could be developed to shape more of both Lorelai's & Lady Bluchard's internal ...

I think that a story without a plot is like a human without a skeleton. Without the plot, it can not stand on its own merits. True, good dialogue can ...

Thank you for your feedback! My plan is to incorporate your feedback into pass three, along with other feedback.

Thank you! I hope you will finish reading it and leave a review. It would help me a lot!

What makes a character overpowered is when they are immune from the consequences of their actions. For example: %u201CI'm assuming you had to take one on?%u201D %u201CWhat?%u201D %u201CYou're bleeding

I love this poem.

I think this work is so old that it pre-dates spoilers.

I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. Looking at what I've written, I do agree that it is too short. One of the tricks I employed was leaving out a lot ...

Thanks for the review Myth! Normally I'd prefer an action in the first sentence, but quite honestly, I wasn't sure what kind of action a Princess would have that would ...

You need a verse about Distinguished Members. ;)

Huzzah!

Nice catch on the full stops! It really made the dialogue clunky.

It's a little scene that I wrote with the idea of it being part of a chapter. If it were a first chapter, it would need a great deal more ...

The joke: A Moderator, a YWSer, and a Monkey walk into a bar. Ouch!