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This is a stickied comment. Only authors can do this.
Can I reply to a stickied comment though??
Yep! Aside from remaining at the top, everything else is the same.
Hmmmm... what if I made a review and posted it after a stickied comment was made?? Let's find out!
Going to make a comment to see if the stickied comment stays on top, even though this totally was made after...
This is not a stickied comment.
Hello world!
Leaves comment. ^_^
And it was the most amazing cliffhanger that the world ever
I was so excited for a joke....
The joke:
A Moderator, a YWSer, and a Monkey walk into a bar. Ouch!
Comment comment comment. I just felt like commenting on this. You know. So how's life. I like your works. I really don't know why you don't post more often. I like pie.
Rude, I demand to hear the joke! :b
hear*
And here I was, so excited to read a good joke :/
As far as editing literary works, I really hate that I can't delete works that I'm done with. All they do is clog up my drafts folder and since I have OCD, it's super annoying. It would be great if you guys could create a way for us to delete works from our drafts folder
I am appalled that you used conjunctions in an essay, Nate! The length of this piece, while appropriate for the topic you wanted to discuss, was as such that it did not manage to thoroughly explore the reasoning behind the monkey's actions. I was also slightly confused when the monkey ate the macerena, but dismissed it as one of the humorous aspects of the piece.
Hello Nate!
My name's Aley and I'm here to comment today.
First of all I'd like to say that you did a really good job out of bold, but I think this work could still see some improvement.
One way that it could improve is that you've got really long sentences. For instance, look at this.
While it's not necessarily bad to have a variety of sentences, there are only three sentences in this single paragraph! That seems like a bit few considering the length of the paragraph and the seriousness of the topic.
All in all, my favorite part was which I find really refreshing and well planned, but you could use some work on variety since you have a lot of it and there should only be a lot of it in a work like this.
Have a good day!
Aley
I wanna join! I wanna join!
I will say, you had me there, but I got it! Haha!
-cough-atleastithinkidid-cough-
I really like the first word. The rest of the piece seems rather disjointed, especially when compared to the title.
And you used chat speak in the first sentence. That's a no-no.
Nananananammamanannanan BATMAN.
Remind me again. Why are we doing this?
Because we're KRAZY!!!!!!!!!!!1
xDDD
Good one.
What if the moderator, the YWSer, and the monkey were THE SAME PERSON?! OMG. PLOT TWIST.
In any case, I think you're monkeying around with this...
Also, if you mark this as a review, I'll be able to continue my conquest with teh most reviewz evar. MWHAHAHAHA.
Which is why it'll probably be marked for spam. *le sigh*
If this gets marked as a review, I'm gonna un-mark it or else I will never catch up!
I think someone is jealous...
I think you have more reviews than I do posts. I'm not sure if that says more about me or you.
*insert witty comment*
Why is the note the longest part of the message?
Because ordinary people like you and me will never be able to comprehend True Art.
*joins the chain*
which YWser we talking about >.>
I wanna be a comment!
How "young" Is said YWSer?
This made me cry. I thought it would be a joke, but it was so touching instead. Thank you.
I feel discriminated.
This is offensive towards monkeys.
That is the worst joke ever. I approve.
Pish posh. Ya know it's the best joke you ever heard!
Nah, the best is probably "Three admins walk into an Irish Pub"
It is taking all of my willpower not to click the "Is this a review?" button.
This is the first time I have ever left a comment to something posted by someone else.
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Nananananammamanannanan BATMAN.
One can submit empty comments by just pressing the "submit" button.
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Shouldn't Big Brother know better? I thought he was always watching...
I found it amusing when the bartender realized that the monkey could talk. He looked so ill the monkey took over for him.
The absolute best part was when the moderator had ordered a soft drink. Priceless!
Unlike Lumi, my favorite part was when the YWSer pulled out his light saber and tried to kill everyone in the bar. Good times, man.
Dang it, I was ready for a great joke.
Unless this is all a joke...
My favorite part was when the monkey realized that he had the magic inside him all along.