Griffinkeeper

This seems very implausible to me. A 13 year old wouldn't be able to hold his own against a 15 year old bully, yet he is supposed to overpower harden ...

Guys, if you don't like it, please give constructive criticism. I think that the use of profanity is really repetitious. This style is reeking with modern rap style. The problem ...

This story is a true form of LITERARY TERRORISM!!! :twisted: That is going to be my new signature.

I finished reading it too, unfortunately, I'm the first one in my house to read it fully. I liked the King Cross section, I also liked the whole Hogwarts section. ...

Oh my! Someone else on the YWS Fan fiction train! *Toots whistle.* I was expecting some story on the CCF. Also, Snoink and I are from CA and Snoink is ...

It's supposed to be medieval fantasy in the sense of swords and magic and whatnot, not in any sort of historical sense, really. This isn't a medieval fantasy, technically speaking. ...

Navel gazing is when you write a poem that focuses entirely on yourself. They can also be called pity poems. This poem has navel gazing written all over it. These ...

THERE SHOULD BE A SPACE FOR A NEW STANZA AFTER THE THIRTEENTH LINE, AND THE WORD "HOW" SHOULD NOT BE IN THE SEVENTEENTH LINE. SORRY 4 THE INCONVINIENCE!! :( I'M ...

What have we here? It was a beautiful, bright morning and the sun was just barely above the horizon. There were strips of snow all over and the ground was ...

AHH! BLOBS OF TEXT! Please have a line between paragraphs. It makes it easier for us to read. The first chapter isn't very inviting. For one, this random guy is ...

Sometimes girls are called Michael, just so you know they are out there. I think you misused the idea of the prologue. A prologue deals with material that is necessary ...

Ugh. I really really don't like the narrator. She is distracting to the reader. Here we are waiting for the story, but she insists on telling us about herself. Big ...

It was difficult to get a general sense of what was going on. Many of the paragraphs have no transitions between them, making it jerky to read, instead of a ...

Obviously the italics don't work...it's got to be my computer! It works whenever I post at school or elsewhere! Ugh! Actually, you disabled BB code in your post. Don't disable ...

This story has a few problems with it. Note: A Tor is a creature, slightly smaller than a man, with teardrop-shaped ears that can hear very well. Dugon are evil ...