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Re: How about...NO!!!!
I can't say I liked this. I didn't like the repetition of "NO!" Because it was just annoying and made the story choppy to read. You also have tons of ...
Feb 12, 2014 -
Re: Jazz Band
I liked this. I was also slightly disappointed by the length, but it was a nice laugh. I do have several thoughts on this however which I will list below. ...
Feb 3, 2014 -
Re: Trapped
Ermahgerd. You did not just... Omg you did. YOU JUST WROTE THE MOST PERFECT HORROR SHORT STORY EVER! Seriously, My horror bestie, @Kevikur better read this. If not, I'll PM ...
Feb 2, 2014 -
Re: Fine
This was interesting, very intriguing. I liked the situation, I loved the description of this man. He was going to propose to his girlfriend... And it looks like she said ...
Feb 2, 2014 -
Re: Set in Stone
I thought this was beautiful. At first, I did know that there was a person speaking to a gravestone. I was thinking that perhaps it was a parent who lost ...
Feb 2, 2014 -
Re: Doll Eyes
I loved your POV on the doll, I just wish you would make it more clear what happens to Rose and how this doll came to be in the arms ...
Jan 31, 2014 -
Re: Cold roads lead to dark places
I like this poem. I think it's a very good poem, with lots of potential. However, I do have a few nitpicks. Do with them as you wish, this is ...
Jan 31, 2014 -
Re: Why I believe in God.
Honestly, I laugh at people who take this personally, as if you're trying to shove our belief down their throats. To us, it is a knowledge. That's what you're emphasizing. ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: Abortion
You had tons of grammar mistakes, and I'm disappointed at your POV. I'm sorry you feel this way about abortions. I don't agree with abortions to be used as a ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: Me
Bonjour! This isn't exactly my kind of poem, but in a weird way I liked it. I just don't understand how it's a narrative. Your rhyming was good, but in ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: The Broken, Bent Man
I saw the title of this story and I thought it was really interesting. I was pleasantly surprised to figure out that Hallie and Jason were not romantically involved. I ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Proudly Psychopathic
You did an amazing job in writing this. It's disturbing to see how a kid takes pleasure in hurting people. So if Trevor has accepted that he is insane, does ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Human Heart with a Garnish to Top
Kev, I swear I have no idea whatsoever how you come up with these ideas and wonderful schemes of stories to write. I have only a few nitpicks. The first ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Princesses Anonymous
This was wonderful. The only bad thing I really have to say is that in the beginning of this piece, you have to many paragraphs. I suggest connect some of ...
Jan 25, 2014 -
Re: An Essay on Society (from the perspective of a cat)
You never cease to amaze me. This piece is so brilliantly worded and it makes me think twice about the way that I live. Perhaps I need to put some ...
Jan 25, 2014
