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Hi theere. This is very good. I really love how you could say so much in so little. You told a complete story and set a tone in a really ...

Hi there. I really like this. I loved that you made a somewhat average and mediocre subject matter really interesting. This is mainly because of the fantastic and flawless flow. ...

Hi there Wow, it's going to be hard to judge the winner for this contest, there are so many amazing poems here. I really like this one. The form you ...

Hey there. This is pretty good. My only problem is the rhyme. I don't thnk it works with this poem at all. Although your subject matter and some of the ...

Hi there. It is an interesting format you used there. The short sentences allow it to flow quite well. However it leaves little room for imagery and character building. I ...

Very nice. As you probably already know, love poems are done very often and can often feel clichéd and repetitive. However this has a twist or a different format. I ...

This has potential, but needs some work. Firstly, I recommend giving it an actual title, simply because thre are quite a few works on this site alone. Secondly, I think ...

Hi there. I really like that you expanded this, it feels more whole and complete and a much better poem. I also like that you lost the dialogue because it ...

Hi Butterfinger. I really like this. It reads very well, almost like poetry. Your wording is perfect. I got really drawn into the story. There are a few things you ...