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Gracie

  • Poetry » Other, General Re: cicadian

    Hi there I'd like to start by saying this is a very dense poem. You have crammed a lot of imagery and descriptions into it. That isn’t to say it ...

    May 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: picking oranges in Westminster, CA

    I really like this. I love this very descriptive style of poetry. I also love that you did not use any capital letters. It makes it seem sort of loose ...

    May 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Painting Dies

    Hi there. This was very good. Your use of launguage here is great. You avoid all cliches and keep everything vivid and strong. This poem here deals with some dark ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Thoughts of a Compulsive Liar

    Hi there. I only have one problem with this piece,but it's a pretty major one. I can't stand the character. She or he just seems very pretentious and annoying. It's ...

    Apr 20, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Young Old Wise Fool

    Hi there. Firstly, I really like the phrase "Young Old Wise Fool" Secondaly, a lot of the lines in the poem are really great. For example "while minding my own ...

    Apr 14, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Pizza

    Hi there. I really like this. I loved that you made a somewhat average and mediocre subject matter really interesting. This is mainly because of the fantastic and flawless flow. ...

    Apr 14, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Moment Where She Smiles: Volume I

    Hi there. These were really good. I loved all three of them. They all flowed perfectly and the structure was maticulous. I also love the themes in his poem. there ...

    Apr 14, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Passenger

    Hi there. I really like this. I like the metaphor of the streets and pavement The one thing I think you could work on is the inconsistent rhyme. It becomes ...

    Apr 6, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Dear Anna (Poetry Pairs)

    Hello there I really like this. I really like the format that you used here. You turned what would have been a average love poem into a really interesting and ...

    Apr 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: How Can I?

    Hi there This is good. The structre and flow is really perfect. Pretty much flawless. However I think this can come off as a bit corny and melodramatic. For example ...

    Apr 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Broken

    Hi there It's a really sad poem, quite heartbreaking, really. So it is very well done. However I think your flow and structure needs some work. It is very dense, ...

    Apr 4, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Imagine This

    Hi there. I can see why you put this in other I can't really tell if it's prose or an odd kind of poetry. Not to say I don't really ...

    Apr 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Moody Days That End in Y (Poetry Pair Contest)

    Hi there Wow, it's going to be hard to judge the winner for this contest, there are so many amazing poems here. I really like this one. The form you ...

    Apr 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Conviction

    Hi there For someone that is not used to writing poetry, this is very good. The language is very nice and the themes and concepts are very interesting. However you’re ...

    Apr 4, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: deleted

    Hi there. I'm not quite sure how I feel about this poem. On one hand the flow and structure is beautiful and rolls really well. On the other hand, I ...

    Apr 4, 2011


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