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Wow, you haven't left me much to nitpick. Grammar, pacing, descriptions--all perfect, as previous reviewers have noted. And I genuinely enjoyed this: beautiful concept, beautiful writing. You deserve

Flame here! You truly have a handle on storytelling. Your characters were well-developed; your exposition was strong, yet all the details were subtly introduced; your descriptions weren't so loaded as

Flame here! Hope I'm not too late! I saved this as a draft, so if any of the following mistakes have been corrected...many apologies. They always tell you "quality over ...

Flame here, as promised! You've done a fantastic job revising. Your descriptions were cleverly incorporated, the perfect complexity, and didn't choke up your paragraphs. The beginning also hooked me i

Flame here, as promised! It's actually a proven fact that people write better when fatigued. They may just not be too keen on the editing process. And I can't believe ...

Hey, Flame here! I love reviewing prologues, because they tend to reveal more of the author's style. This, however, felt more like a first chapter than a prologue. Many details ...

Hey, Flame here! Hope this comment isn't too late. How you stressed that writing is a magnet, that you can't escape once it's attracted you...perfect. How you stressed that writing ...

Hey, Flame here! I didn't read your brainstorming, as I prefer to be surprised, so my review is based solely off this chapter. Fantastic job! I have to admire your ...

Wow. For the first time, I have next to nothing to criticize. Your lack of contractions only contributed to the grim mood, your sentences flowed smoother than honey, the paragraphs ...

Hey, Flame here! I was immediately vacuumed in. Mythology has always been a fascinating subject to me, whether Greek or Egyptian, and you can imagine my excitement when I learned ...

Hey, Flame here! (Not too late to welcome you to YWS, by the way?) I'm rather partial to stories with less action, as they delve into the characters and their ...

Flame here to review! Happy New Year's! I can't believe that after seven chapters, you still don't fail to amaze me. Sorry if this is shorter than other reviews; it's ...

Yes, first to review! Unless someone sneaks in a submission while I'm typing... Once again, well-done on the research :D. I'm sure your history teacher will love this. Now, you ...

Review for a review! Wow, just realized how similar the character Kira in our fantasy novels are. Same name, both warriors, both experiencers of death ;). But yours is more ...

Hey, Flame here! First off, I love your prose. A lot of young authors struggle with where to place it, much less how to do it (and I'm not an ...