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Thank you. I thought that whole 'shrill cry call' line just needed another syllable so that's why I added the call.

Thank you very much! I guess it's okay that it's long. I always write long poems, I guess I just got used to the form I often use. Thank you! ...

that is awsome! how on earth do you manage to write for that long without it turning to drivel? Yours truly "that person who can't write poems that are more ...

Wow. That's what I though when I finished reading this. It's amazing! Well done and some applauding for you. I love this. The layout was great and I just loved ...

All the errors were done on purpose. It's written from a dog's view. I didn't think they'd have perfect grammar. Also, the beginning meant that its eyes were watering. You ...

Thank you, everyone. I'm glad I left an impression.

I don't write many short poems. I prefer long ones, that way you can voice everything and only get the poeple who truly like your work to read it. But ...

Very well done for your first entry. The person who posted before me summed up all the mistakes so all I have left to say is; great job and keep ...

Wow, very intense. I love that. :)

Love the rhythm and the way it's set up. Great poem!

I don't find it muddled, in fact I find that 'muddled' is how it should feel, like you have to sort it out to fully understand. Makes you think.

Amazing! Very interesting poem. I might want to read more of your stuff.

Brilliant! I love this piece, no spelling or grammar errors at all. Breath-taking. ;)

I like this, it's got mystery. An unknown quality to itself. It makes you think, guess what happened, what might happen. I like that, it's nice to see unknown qualities ...

Ooh! I love it! Kind of dark, a little mysterious. Fantastic! :)