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Servile in nature Self is Sins won’t come ‘round I keep telling my life A very interesting set-up. The way it flows is quite interesting. It’s fortunate that it’s all ...

Oh, very well done! Beautiful poem that at first glance, I wasn't expecting it to flow well with the lines varying in length so much but it really works here! ...

Very well done! I loved your use of vocabulary and your wording. Some people may not catch the meaning, but your vocabulary reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe's. I remember ...

Hm, I wasn't sure about the short lines but it seems to flow quite well. There are some lines such as the ones at the end that seem a little ...

A very interesting style and set-up. It's quite beautiful and it flows well. I can't seem to find anything wrong with this besides what's already been said. Very well done, ...

It's very good, but what seems odd is how it starts out with two-line stanzas but you only keep that up for a little while before you move on to ...

Well done. Very good imagery and use of metaphors. I like the feel of this poem and it had a nice rhythm. A little off at times but otherwise great! ...

A very good collection of thoughts, a few punctuation and grammar errors but nothing huge. It doens't quite flow right but then again, it doesn't need to, as this seems ...

It's good but I have a few suggestions: 1) Try to separate the paragraphs more, it's hard to look at. 2) post chapters, not pages. No one likes getting only ...

Absolutely fantastic imagery! Very emotional and a true sentimental poem (Though not in the usual sense). I love the layout you chose (most people, myself included, just keep the poem ...

Light and dark.... I always love poems about light and dark and let me say, you're poem was no exception! Well done! Short, but meaningful. Very good flow, it had ...

Brilliant. I don't need to correct you on anything right now, that was fantastic. It did remind me of Edgar Allen Poe a bit, in a good way, similar flow, ...

Great wording! I love the flow. It has a sort of sombre feel t some points and I like that. An amazing poem, I currently have nothing to critique since ...

Wow, very well done! I love the description and it leaves you with a rather creepy feeling. Not quite chills down your spine, not quite a need to catch your ...

Short, simple and very true. Well done for someone new to writing. Very thoughtful. I like this poem, it manages to pack so much meaning into so few words. I ...