Galerius

I have to disagree with Grahks on his revised suggestion "Bullets batter my soul / Undo the humanity I deserve". That line has simplistic and obvious imagery and just makes ...

When I cleaned the street on my knees, you kept away. When their spit rinsed my hair, you looked the other way. When they pinched my body, when my soul ...

If this poem is meant for people under the age of 5, then your poem is perfectly shaped and you should disregard everything I've said below. If not, then this ...

Since you are only 13, I'm going to restrain from some of my more unrestrained comments. Boys did make sense. Boys were are simple. Boys know how to laugh. Boys ...

I am surprised. I thought this was a typical teenage-angst-ridden poem - and it is, of sorts. But you've managed to do something I haven't seen in a while; you ...

You, my friend, are a master of circles. You bring around the audience to a full cavalcade of emotions from revolution and proletariat uprising in the beginning, to despair and ...

What? Galerius, you didn't tear my work apart at all this time.... ITs like there is something missing. *faints* Just kidding. :) Hmm, I'm not in the mood, but that ...

I always hate to critique a piece after errtu2 is done with it because of how well s/he plumbs through the poem's fallacies, but here I am, so let's start. ...

How come I saw you in that day And, in the next again, I'm never gonna see you? My tears fill me everyday What did i do? Please tell me ...

This poem doesn't feel right for a line-by-line so I'm just going to pick and choose some lines that you need to look at. He thinks to himself quite frankly ...

1) The rhyme scheme is messed up. Generally I don't recommend a solid rhyme at all, but if you really want to, then please make it consistent. "Blind" does not ...

some mistakes you make you never can take back what you did you can never rewind time you have to do what's right and make thing's right again.Running away from ...

Life is unfair Bad way to start a poem. It doesn't matter if you speak in English or Portuguese - the fact of the matter is that complaining outright does ...

I wandered through the ballroom Shadows playing on the silver walls And candlelight flickering like the souls Of young lovers gone before their time There's something about this line that ...

For starters, we need to know who you're talking about and why we should care. Is he handsome? Is he your morning star in life, having bewitched you from the ...