Poetry Fight
You say I can’t write,
Come on, let’s fight.
Let’s use our pencils as swords
Go on, cast your wards.
It’s a battle of words.
Get ready, set, go,
This is a competition, you know.
That’s all you got?
Your poetry can rot,
Mine’s certainly better than yours.
I’ll be a good sport
And not take you to court,
For wasting that tree
Because paper isn’t free
And that eraser isn’t either.
Maybe with time,
Your poetry will be fine,
But now it needs serious work
And in the shadows it should lurk
Until it’s bearable
Haha!
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Hah, it made me laugh. It's so true, though. There as those who can write, and those who just... can't. And clearly, you can! Nice work; keep it up!
I'm not sure whether you still want this "poem" to be critiqued, but let me know if you do.
Hilarious. Loved it.
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(gets ready to fight back)
(do you know how long it took me to remember we had portfolios so I could find this poem?
It sounds so right. *prints it out without your permission and enters into a contest* It's mine, I say! All mine, and so I must win. It's pretty awesome, right, my excellent poem?
Hmm... I dare you to challenge every single poet in the world with this poem. I wonder how many would take it seriously.
Pencils, sharp! Paper, here! Trees, dead! Nooo!
This was one of the most original pieces of poetry I have ever read. Usually, when people think of funny poems, the whole poem leads up to the last line which suddenly makes the poem hilarious. Your poem didn't do this. The very first line set the mood and tone. Very good. It seemed sort of "tongue-in-cheek"-ish.
The rhyming was all very smooth and natural. Yay! I don't have to talk about rhyming patterns! Your's was excellent. It almost seemed like you just sat down and jotted down your thought, but with better qualitly. Very interesting.
Keep writing poems. You have a good sense of humour.
-Sea-
This was pretty good! I liked how it was always the last word of the last line of every stanza that had no other word rhyming it. I thought that that was very creative. I thought that this poem was very creative. Great job, Kaylyn!
thanks for the feedback! Glad that everyone had enjoyed it so far.
That was so funny, and Cat's right. It can be very true sometimes.
That was really funny. It appeals to all the writers and poets on the site and is pretty much a laugh for everyone! I hope you write another.
The pencil swords were funny and it was all just plain hilarious!
Haha, that's really funny. ^_^ How did you come up with something like this? It almost sounds more like a rap then a poem, but it's still really funny. ^_^ Well great job.
I loved it...its hilarious. thank you for making me laugh! i needed it.
Loved it. Loved the way you worked with the words and make it flow really nicely. Very original and it seemed like you really were at war with someone.
Loved it.
I LIKEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE IT!!!!!!!! MORE POETRY YOU WRITE SHOULD!!!!!!!!!
Hmm, I'm not in the mood, but that is a good idea...
-laughs- That was great. Favorite part: "until it's bearable."
This really made me think about how I fight with myself when I write poetry, but it made me take a step back and see the humor in it. (:
Thanks for all the positive crits! I dont get those very much in poetry.
What? Galerius, you didn't tear my work apart at all this time.... ITs like there is something missing. *faints* Just kidding.
An excellent little ditty. Everything flowed smoothly and reminded me of "Everything you can do, I can do better."
You did really good with this one.
You finally took words and made them rhyme without forcing them to. I really love the first two stanzas those were the best. 
keep writing like this and you'll go very far. As always keep writing! 
Galerius, all I can say is thanks. You were a part of my inspiration. But no its not all about you. My competitive nature kicked in.
Thanks for all the comments guys! And yes I'm very competitive, playing sports all my life does that.
Oh ho ho!!
That's very original Kaylyn, very fresh and very chirpy!
The dialogues are so spontaneous an does not sound forced at all, the rhymes fit in perfectly.
A really nice idea!!
WOAH...
What can I say? It was funny (for sure.)
It was different.
It was... well GREAT.
But it sounded like a rap
weird
Hee hee
in shadows it should lurk... he hee, instant classic.
This wouldn't happen to be about me, would it?
I love this immensely. It made me giggle. Though, I suddenly felt the need to challenge you. *giggles*
Ah yes, years of playing sports suddenly comes into play. I get way too competitive.
ANYway, this isn't about my stupid horomones...or emotions (something like that) it's about how your poem rocks my socks...that sounds really weird.
Keep writing!
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Risa out
Well, at first it was. But then I wanted to make it a bit comedic.
This poem was good. who were you writing to ... it seemed as if you were really in a war with someone... i know exactlly how you feel. The peom really shows that you spent time thinking (or maybe not... like poets do).... and this make me feel better to know i'm not alone... in my poem wars of course... thankx for being my ally
Thanks!
Good job, Kaylyn. I really like that!
It all worked nice together and it can be very true.
Good job again!