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Re: -Deleted-
When did I start feeling the weight of the world? When did the world get so cold? Why did I have to break your heart? You start off in an ...
May 8, 2009 -
Re: Helpless
So filled I can hardly breathe. Trying so hard but I'm never relieved. I'm trapped in this state. There's no one to talk to; they can't relate. I'm left to ...
May 7, 2009 -
Re: Someone new
Do you remember those careless days? when I couldn't wait to see you, But now you've changed in too many ways. Do you remember the things we used to do? ...
May 5, 2009 -
Re: Utterly attached {edited}
I dare wish our time hadn't ran by through our fingers, just like sand. Oh no, not the old "Time is grains of sand" metaphor. Don't begin your poem with ...
May 1, 2009 -
Re: Rubik's Cube
You puzzle me, You; Whose mind I can turn every angle, Caress every corner And still meet a dead end. Sounds more like a labyrinth than a Rubik's cube. A ...
May 1, 2009 -
Re: Desire
Desire is Power. Burning brighter than any star, brining us closer to who we are. Stars burn, blah blah. It's an old image, puts nothing new on the table. Give ...
Apr 29, 2009 -
Re: cradling brains
Once, I held a human brain, a sad round thing - Chuck the "once" into the circular receptacle. It just adds a connotation of time passing for you, when the ...
Apr 27, 2009 -
Re: <Deleted by Author>
This isn't much of a poem. First of all, not knowing how to spell "dying" doesn't come off as very impressive, so have your title fixed as soon as you ...
Apr 24, 2009 -
Re: I am the wild horse
I'm still working on making my poems more consistent, but I tried to make it as formal as I could without completely changing my original draft. Formal? As in...? It ...
Apr 22, 2009 -
Re: deleted
I was standing amongst a large crowd when the rain began to fall While others ran indoors I remained outside The presence of the rain was soothing for me The ...
Apr 20, 2009 -
Re: Don't think i'm going to finish
Guess you won't finish. But since this has no reviews, allow me. The gentle lapping of the waves at me feet relaxed my body. Pictures of what had happened kept ...
Apr 19, 2009 -
Re: Tell Him
He's all alone, just sitting there On his shoulders is the whole world's hate He bears the wind with a frontwards stare He's still alive but it's too late "Frontwards ...
Apr 19, 2009 -
Re: Light
The sunshine breaking free Of cloud cover And the moon gleaming On frosty ground. Might as well say this now: capitalizing the first letter of every line is not necessary ...
Apr 19, 2009 -
Re: 3am in the City
Standing on the center line, incandescent lights casting orange on the wet pavement… There are good ways of trailing off a phrase slowly and there are bad ways. You just ...
Apr 14, 2009 -
Re: The Inevitable War
If you could see what I see, you'd know that the world is in grave danger. Where sturdy forests once reside, now lives a foreshadow of what's to come. I ...
Apr 13, 2009
