I love this poem because it is so relateable. Or atleast it is to me. Poems dealing with emotions are usually the strongest in my opinion, this one does a great job of showing it.
So filled I can hardly breathe.
Trying so hard but I'm never relieved.
I'm trapped in this state.
There's no one to talk to; they can't relate.
I'm left to deal with this on my own.
They can't see it on my face.
No one can hear it in my tone.
I shouldn't mind though. I've always been alone.
I can feel it pulsing through me.
Running in my veins, taking over my brain.
Being riddled with this pain
It's not easy to sustain.
It's starting to take root inside.
I keep running but finding no where to hide.
Under its power I am condemned.
Sure that my mind will never mend.
I'm trapped in its clutch.
It's barred from my touch.
This smiling face is just a ruse.
It's fighting so hard...
I'm going to lose.
i would go through a complete evaluation of what this poem means to me, but it seems quite obvious. I can relate to every word you've written here.
One nit-pick:Change it so only the sentences have uppercase letters, not every line.
Otherwise great job. This is one of my favorite poems on this site.
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