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Okay, let's see.... I think you should leave out this: "They’re isn’t any danger! Wake up! You’ve all been possessed, not by mysterious enemies but by that hat! It’s like ...

Wow. Wow. Simply wonderful. You just need to develop that imagery more. How did the sausage look like? And what inspired you to write this poem?

It's okay! You don't have to defend yourself! I forgot to mention that it was extremely well-written. :D Though the satire didn't make me laugh :( (UGH. Okay, I can't ...

Hey everyone! Thanks for all the critiques... Sorry if this offended any of ya; it is comedy, but I suspect none of you laughed out loud :D I just had ...

(About the Thousand Splendid Suns) I know many people who liked it, but I personally thought that a subject so deep and sad should not have been discussed in such ...

Of course I wrote this! SO PROUD!

Thank you very much for your critiques! I tried to change it according to your suggestions, except the one where you both thought it would be better to make it ...

NICE! I really like it now. :) It's excellent. There are only two problematic lines now: "And intrudes on its one-perfection." I think it's that last word that makes this ...

I read this again and (it's still good!) I found something that can improve the rhythm and meaning of your last stanza enormously. Instead of "playing"--make it "plays."

Sweet. Too short to write a full review on, but this is the sort of thing that makes you smile. :D

Wow! I love it SO much more now! I think this is the best imrpovement in a poem I've ever seen here! EXCELLENT!:) I feel proud of you. I have ...

I too like this. I noticed it was a haiku from the first time I looked at it. I especially liked the pearly dawn comparison. Memories fade was interesting too.

I love this! It's so simple but it has a melody...it's sort of like Cecilia by Simon&Garfunkel but it's also We Will Rock You-ish. I love this. I was singing ...

Thank you so much :) You all really helped me shape this.

WOW! I love this. Something about the last stanza isn't working though... Anyhow, is this about how Bush lied to us about the war??? Or is it completely off-topic?