Gadi.

Thank you! I do hope I didn't discourage, and if I did, I did not mean to. You didn't discourage at all! As always, you were helpful. I sort of ...

I tried to read Eragon, but it was SO BORING. Okay, the only thing I am reall impressed by is that he actually had the determination to write that fat ...

Thank you all very much!!!! smorghisberg--I agree about the prologue part, so I made the chapter longer. Thanks for all the compliments and complaints... Talking_Pinata--it starts here. Actually, this

GACK. This is good, but I so disagree. It's really interesting, actually, though George Lucas was NOT the most influential person of the 20th century.

So I read it again now, after I just saw your entry, and it all works, other than the last image (cobblestone). Now what does that mean? That poetry should ...

Amelia, your edit didn't change too much for me... I think now the main mistake is clearer: you have too many images, and they're mixed in a way that separates ...

Thanks for everything! All of you guys thought the same thing--it's too abstract, too unconnected. I agree. Here's what I see it as: On the steps to school a senior ...

Beatles, Beatles, Beatles. Best band ever-- not too good song. Sorry.

"Ay, the agony! That donkey's been gadding about forever now, asking how is he so good at poetry?!?!?" ARGH!

I can't speak. My throat is blocked. Tears in my eyes. Seriously. And I am a guy. Best poem on this site. Ever. So what's your secret? PM me because ...

It's a good story idea, but not too promising as a part of a story/novel. I'd read it if you made into a novel. It sounds actually quite interesting, though ...

HAHAHA! THAT WAS HILARIOUS! Awesome job. I just don't like the last rhyme with the "well". So aweome job.

It's not perfect, but it's interesting. My main objection, though, is when you say "It is hope." That sucks. Instead, leave it as it is--the reader would guess what the ...

Thanks ya'll: you really raised my self-whatever it is. It really made me happy that you felt this was moving (because that's the feeling I was aiming for. :D) Anyway, ...

What do you mean by the "Once upon a time"? That she wanted it to be perfect relationship, or...that it was once upon a time...fairy tale...