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Hey BBB! (I mean, Jared.) Okay. So I liked this. I agree with basically everyone above me. The style is very interesting, I was glued. It's also hard to critique ...

I think this is a good first poem. My first poem was horrible. But I'm here to help you fix yours! The actual title "Home is where the heart is" ...

Mmm. I thought this had great potential. I liked the repetition of the last line of the poem in the first stanza. I thought it was an interesting poem, the ...

This definitely is sad. I think it has great tragic potential. However, you have a few mistakes here and there that really ruined the atmosphere of the poem for me. ...

Sampoop! Okay. I'll be throatcutting honest with ya. I did not like this. It's not that it's bad or anything, because, apparently, everyone else thinks it was terrific. On the ...

Icaruss, this was really, really sharp and sly, very witty. Dark. Unlike some other people, I found the connection to the title fairly obvious by the third sentence. "She is ...

Snoink basically said it. Overall, this had a great, though a big overdone, idea, which you seemed to handle pretty well. Maybe add a little more metaphores, a little more ...

I thought this was not bad for a first time. It seemed like a word for word duplicate of The Departed, but we could fix that. The structure was off-key, ...

Gackkkkk.... INFODUMP! Sorry. Just had to blurt it out. Well, I have to disagree with Dear Mr. Bear on a few things here. Don't get offended though: my critique WILL ...

I'm going to try to ignore some grammer mistakes... but a few might seep into here. "Have you ever heard what a Jewish synagogue sounds like when a bomb takes ...

This is going to be so hard for me to critique. One, because I like it for what it is: a simple, lyrical interpretation of God. (Yes, I read your ...

ASTOUNDING BEGINNING, holy mother. I adore the realism in this story--just that he was swirling into the darkness or whatever, that was genius. This opening is mesmerizing and kept me ...

This poem was confusing and disjointed. It was also interesting, fresh, and very rhythmic. I feel as if it could use a lot more extra help though, but I personally ...

So... I liked the first stanza. Not so much the second. The second felt very flimsy and somewhat cliche. I'm trying to find example lines from it, but I realized ...

First of all, WELCOME TO YWS! Second of all: I didn't like it. Actually, I hated it. But don't take it to heart too much--there are way too many first-time ...