Frinderman

You know, I truly love this poem of yours. It is most certainly beautiful and realistic.

There is some work that could be done, however this is a beautiful story. I enjoyed it very much. Great work!

I don't have much to say nor do I have much to explain, but I liked this poem very much.

This is a beautiful poem. ^-^

Thank you for the help. The story is told by a boy however and you were right that "if" was a misspelling, it was correct at first but when I ...

Though I don't feel like reviewing this, I would like to mention that I love this poem. Have a great day. ^-^

Yeah I understand your points. I cut out a lot because I felt too graphic with some of my lines... I might reincorporate some of them, if so, then tomorrow. ...

This was a beautiful poem. ^-^ Third line from the bottom, you forgot to separate "returning" and "to". Have a great day!

I guess my mind is weird then, I use them to emphasize that a word or phrase holds more meaning than just its placement in the sentence. Just to add ...

Thanks for the help, but like I said, this is personal, I am not fabricating lines to make things sound prettier. I do appreciate pointing out my spelling error, as ...

All I have to say is that this is beautiful. ^-^

Thank you for the criticism, I understand how passive tense can weaken writing, I simply forgot to take that into account. As for the your third point, my use of ...

Thanks! The reason for the tildes is because of the format changing when I upload my work. When I don't place something between stanzas it removes the breaks in between ...

I understand the italics confusing the flow of the poem for you, however I merely used them for emphasis, not to affect how the poem is read, most of the ...

Thank you for the suggestions! I realized I typed past instead of passed and I fixed the weird sentence, I knew using the word "with" twice the way I did ...