Formslipper

I read it. It was entertaining once more! The characters are growing on me, although I'm starting to think that Evan is more outgoing than I thought. No nitpicks. Be ...

I read it. And I thought it was good; it had a very fantasy feel to it. I'm not sure what it is, but there's a missing element... hmmm, let's ...

I read it. Again, well done! This was a surprising turn of events, and I liked it. From the outset, you developed Michael's character strongly, and everything seemed to click. ...

I read it. This was a major info dump! You should spread out this info across the first couple chapters using dialogue and passive descriptions. I liked the backgroundy feel ...

I read it. The overall plot is great, and your writing is well-developed. However, I can't help but notice the sexual underpinnings of this segment. Is he a rapist or ...

I read it. Everything was good- the setting, the characters. I won't nitpick, because there isn't much to nitpick :) Instead, I'll just give a light criticism. The characters were ...

I haven't read it yet. I'm gonna do a first impression sort of thing, then give my general opinion at the end. My Hiro Prologue: He was running out of ...

I read it. Awesome job, Soulkana! The story's definitely taking shape. I could nitpick on this, but I'll leave that for others. Let me just say that there were some ...

I read it. Awesome job once again! Nothing was offensive, though his description of his sibling was a little (very) frisky. Altogether, it's extremely entertaining and I'm beginning to understand ...

I read it. Very well done, Grandison- everything flowed together, but I'm still a little confused. While these two characters are step-siblings, they like to flirt with each other (which ...

I read it. And I think you should make it longer. You see- I had a desirous feeling at the end where I simply wanted more. Also, your questions were ...

I read it. I especially enjoyed her conscious struggle against death, because older writers haven't touched on anything like that yet (or so I've seen). I always like anything original, ...

I read it. It seems that this isn't fiction, like you wrote it from experience. If it's true love you want, humans ain't gonna have it. God offers so much ...

I read it. For only thirteen years old, this is pretty good! When I was thirteen, I stunk at writing- at fifteen I'm not even that great. But I see ...

I read it. Emotion is always excellent, because words can only go so far. I don't understand diabetes, though. If you put the disease's references into an elementary-level vocabulary, then ...