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Hey!! Forever here with a review!! This seems to be a continuation of the Magic Mushroom:Getaway. If I am not wrong, this is the first short story I am reading ...

Hey! Forever here with a review!! I just wonder about Harry's thoughts. I can't reason why he is so afraid about telling her mom. Like one shouldn't be so afraid ...

Hey!! Forever here with a review. First of all, there were some tense inconsistencies in the story. You frequently switched between past and present tense. You should write the whole ...

Hey! Forever here with a review!! "Didn't you see it when he appeared in front of us? His jump?" Substitute the "he" with Leonard because this he can also refer ...

Hey! Forever here with a review!! In this part, Emma had the nature of the past Emma, the Emma which we didn't see in the last part. Not fully but ...

Hey! Forever here with a review!! Not much happening in this part. This was a relaxing part and provided some insights to the gala. I wonder why many characters seem ...

Hey!! Forever here with a review!! A lot of thoughts filled in in this part. I quite liked it how you portrayed all the thoughts and emotions of Harry in ...

Hey! Forever here with a tiny review! Wow, this was a great story. Thue burning tears streaming down my face, almost matching the buckets of rain from the sky. You ...

Forever here with a review!! Boss girl might not be the best title for the story. Think of something else. Maybe something like a thief girl or the girl without ...

Hey! Forever here with a review!! I would just tell to seperate the author's note from the rest of the story. Format it into italics and add A/N: in the ...

Heyy! Forever here with a review!! First of all, what it actually is. Like it doesn't read like a sjort story at all. It reads more like a poem than ...

Hey! Forever here with a review! It seemed like everyone in the valley, though, was going inside their shacks earlier than they should have The construction here feels a bit ...

Heyy!! Forever here with a review!! The beginning actually made me think that she saw a dream and the following were the consequences but seems like I was wrong. Also ...

Hey! Forever here with a review! First of all, inconsistency of tenses. At a few places, I did feel that the tense changed from present tense to past tense when ...

Hey! Forever here with a review!! This MWSC sounds very exciting and interesting. S can stand for safety. That is the only thing I can think of at the moment. ...