FlyingInEbony

I'm in love with this poem. It's simply beautiful - the way you put everything together, every detail enamored with a metaphor or a simile, from the title until the ...

Hi, Angel! :) You have great expression in this poem. Very nice imagery, light, and, at the same time, evident. I would suggest, however, to place punctuation marks at the ...

Hi, Princess! Pretty nice haikus. My favorite line was probably in the last stanza - "life eternal, shine forever". All of these sound beautiful, they make up a lovely story. ...

WOW! This was really beautiful! You have a talent in poetry... Your piece is flowing so easily! It doesn't make the reader feel as if you strained to make out ...

Hey, Shubhi! :D I liked your story, it's new! I just wanted to point out that your prologue is a little rushed because your story starts out with a climax ...

Hey, KatTrain! Nice to meet you, I'm Chisel! :D First of all, I would like to say that this poem is very original. When I first read it, the setting ...

Hello, Jordrake! Welcome to YWS! Let's get started on your piece... I'm currently working on my critiquing skills. :) Your story is promising; I liked quite a few things in ...

Hi Snoink! I've read over your piece (no kidding), and I just love your creativity! :smt003 Not only you changed the outcome of your usual-type fairy tale, it was still ...

Hey, Joanne! Welcome to YWS, I hope you'll like it here! I'm Chisel, nice to meet you! I've read your article, and I somewhat agree with you. Personally, I do ...

Hi Ruin! I read your poem, and I really, really liked it. The concept is something simple, but your structure is beyond complex (in a good way)! I'm thinking that ...

I generally like to read classic novels and such, but by force (e.g. my English class), I was able to read two books which I most certainly disliked. Those were ...

We were sitting in the parking lot behind my apartment building in his black Ford pickup truck. That day's counseling session hadn't been about how to handle an argument, or ...

It’s against the rules. But, I would take out this comma, it doesn't flow right when you pronounce the sentence. Dad has to be home for I would put something ...

Hi! I liked your story, it was captivating. Kind of grotesque with your vivid descriptions. :D I agree with most of the reviews that talk about grammar, punctuation, capitalization and ...

This story is nicely written, good job. I liked the imagery you created when describing the setting, it makes sense that an old house would have a wooden staircase and ...