Flower~Child

Ok I am going to go piece by piece on this one. Or at least try to. First Part. I like this, and I like how it goes down to ...

Ok review time. First of all I love this. It is a really good idea for a story, but whose parent's are like that? (Anyway just going to go through ...

Review time! Ok here we go. *** Chapter 1- A Lovely Nightmare Daniel swept in from behind and wrapped his arms around my waist.  I jumped, but he seemed highly ...

Review time! Ok here we go. *** Chapter 1- A Lovely Nightmare Daniel swept in from behind and wrapped his arms around my waist.  I jumped, but he seemed highly ...

I like the repetition of the Beach, but shouldn't it be the waves since that is what you are talking about. I get that the place is the beach but ...

This is amazing! I wish I could write like that. You go from one line to the next and it all flows. Keep Writing -Flower-

I like this. I can't quite understand it, but I do like it.

I think the rhyming in this is to forced. Poetry doesn't have to have rhyme. That's your choice though...oh well that's all I can think of for the time being.

I see some errors, but I am going to go from book point of view. Nico isn't talkative. He is dark and mean. Percy and Annabeth wouldn't be holding hands ...

I like this. I think that at first it made no sense because of your title. You were talking about all of these colors when she can't see? Then you ...

Ok review time! I love how this flows! It's amazing. The only thing that I see is that you misspelled passing, anniversary, tomorrow, particularly, and themselves is one word. Well, ...

I really like all the emotion in this. I also like how you go back to the swings in this. It just makes it so much better.

O my gosh I just figured it out! Now I get it and like it alot more!

I like this alot. It just seems kind of jumpy to me. It goes from what you want to the ride of your life. Also there is no punctuation in ...

I like the first one, I don't get the file thing, it sounds like the joker haha.