Flemzo

You wrote these at 2am? Kind of shows. Not in a "Oh my God these are horrible lyrics" sort of way, but more in a "these could definitely use some ...

Interesting use of haiku stanzas in this piece, but there is something lacking in this poem. I don't know if it's the subject matter (I'm not much of an angsty, ...

Very impressive, I must say. Very haunting and a fun, quick read. As far as story goes, I love the stream of consciousness narrative, and I love how the main ...

I don't often do reviews, but I'm suffering from a bout of insomnia at the moment (it's currently quarter to one in the morning here, and I've been trying to ...

Tam Tam: *cracks knuckles and dusts off reviewing pen* It's been forever since I've done a review, and lyrics are something I dig, and I especially love good parodies, so ...

Well, well, well, look who it is. Now, I know that this is your second poem you posted, and that I'm pretty sure you haven't looked at what I wrote ...

Before I begin: Welcome to YWS. Remember that it is only right that you crit two for every post you make. Blah blah blah set of rules, read them, live ...

TOO LATE! Going to be brutal (though my crits might be a little rusty... it's been almost a year since I've done one): Them that can’t look past their noses, ...

I enjoyed this one. At points it seemed a little vague as to what you were trying to say, but what I'm basically getting from it is that the speaker ...

This was.... okay. I can't say it's great, and I can't say it's terrible. It's just... okay. Not really original in the subject, and definitely no original in the telling. ...

Every once in a while, when I feel like critiquing something, I come across a work that doesn't need any work whatsoever. This is one of those cases. I honestly ...

What a sad poem. Great job of portraying that emotion. Your imagery was fantastic, and I enjoyed every bit of this poem. The only real critique I have comes in ...

First off, excellent poem. Very vivid, and excellent choice of topic. However, there was no punctuation until the very end. In some poems, that's acceptable, but it's a very special ...

To start off, you have no punctuation. In some poems, that's fine, but it's a very special case. Just because it's poetry doesn't mean that you can throw out traditional ...

Canned in the fragrance's prevalence, This just put a weird image in my mind: someone being trapped in one of those soup cans. I know that's not the image you ...