Fireweed

"White bird flying through the air, Wings wide open spreading goodness everywhere. Olive branch in beak, Travelling to every peak. " I would break up the second line, put a ...

I just finished reading this book in my Lit. class and really enjoyed it... It was so depressing, though... Anyway, this is a bit short for a literary analysis thingy, ...

Ha, this was pretty awesome. To echo other people, the Commodore's dialogue was perfect, but some of Jack's sounded a little forced or something... Like maybe you were trying too ...

Hmm... I liked this, but I don't think that it conveys your meaning to the reader very effectively. It was well-written; your imagery and language were strong, the rhyme and ...

Very impressive for a first poem! I really enjoyed this; it flowed very smoothly and the fire metaphor was cool. Ooh, and your vocabulary is awesome.^_^ However, this bit confused ...

Ooh, [u]The Giver[/u] is one of my favorite books! Have you read [u]Gathering Blue[/u] ? It's not a sequel, exactly, but there's a subtle connection between the stories, and it's ...

Very interesting; I like it. I like how you took the classic fairy tale cliche of a princess becoming a swan and made it... different. This has some really lovely ...

Phorcys, of course you should comment on pieces you disliked and give the writer constructive criticism, but I think it's possible to do that w/o offending them. :) Anyway, I ...

Wow, I really like this. I love the image and the comparison of the birch trees to soldiers. That simile works really well, I think; I love the idea that ...

Ha ha. Black Sword of Rhyme. That was rather melodramatic. But you have a point. I basically agree with Phorcys about this poem: rhyme can beautiful, but sometimes it just ...

I'm sure you're totally sick of everyone telling you this, but please correct the grammatical errors. It's hard for me to focus on the quality of the actual writing when ...

I like it, the rhyme and rhythm are very well-done. Alot of it seemed rather cliche, though... Like Jenna said it didn't quite seem heartfelt. There's just so much teenage ...

Haikus aren't normally my favorite genre of poetry either. I think they're difficult to write well because the strict length and syllable pattern is so constricting. However, these were pretty ...

Wow. The images in this poem are absolutely beautiful, they took my breath away. This has a very sad, whistful tone without being totally depressing; I like that. I had ...

This definitely needs stronger imagery. I can only imagine what a terrifying experience going through a hurricane must have been. Try to make the reader feel that terror. This has ...