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Re: 'Coven Born' Prologue
Here my critique Breathing softly I did my best to resist the temptation to sneeze. Dust had risen in the air and my allergies were subdued with patience that had ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: Removed by Author
The lightning lit the sky with a deafening crack in perfect unison with the booming thunder and the constant downpour. Thunderstorms are said to keep people awake at night or ...
Jul 10, 2008 -
Re: Return to Milantis
Hey Jamie who rocks and writes rocking stories Heres my Critique hope you like it King Ofusa nodded, “She’ll be safe there. As soon as the battle is won, we ...
Jul 7, 2008 -
Re: Moment
Well the story was good and so was the style you wrote it but it seemed a little hmmmmmmm well a little well anyway there is something missing. As if ...
Jul 7, 2008 -
Re: Removed by Author
oh my god :shock: That was the best story i've read on Lycans and Vampires in years. The detail was enormous but somehow balanced so it would not make the ...
Jul 7, 2008 -
Re: Untitled story Chapter 1
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :shock: :shock: First of all the good news. the story has a good plot but the last part gave me a little anger against the character. Anyway. They story ...
Jul 7, 2008 -
Re: Alexandrite prologue
Well as far as i know JabberHut already pointed out all the mistakes. Like JabberHut i am really curious about the cat but i have my theories about the rest ...
Jan 19, 2008 -
Re: Pendragon series
I am the best Pendragon fan here. I read the first 6 books and i am waiting for the 7th and 8th. I should write to MacHale too. How do ...
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: Icy Paths Chapter 1
Aveyond never heard of it. anyway. Great plot, great story wow. Rhen swung her arm out of Lila grip and marched up to Lars. "Not a go Lars sighed and ...
Aug 14, 2007 -
Re: Guardians
Interesting great story. Will you continue it? Anyway as far as i saw the only mistake you made was seperating the paragraphs at the wrong place. 1. It was as ...
Aug 12, 2007 -
Re: Prologue - Due North
Great story. Hers a small critique It has(had) been made more powerful than any sword has(Had) a right to, through crushed prayers, betrayal, and tears of blood. My hope soon ...
Aug 11, 2007 -
Re: prologue-beneath the shadows
Wow that was great. Hers a small critique for a great story. 1.All he could do was stand there, two bodies [lay there] side by side. Two girls, reaching the ...
Aug 10, 2007 -
Re: Journey to a Dream
:D WOW :D thats what i call a story. You described it so well even I could not have done some thing like that. Keep posting, I'm sure you other ...
May 13, 2007