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Re: Three: Silence
Hello! So this is an interesting story! I love the cliffhanger ending as well, and am dying for the next chapter! So I don't really have a lot to say, ...
Dec 13, 2018 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (12.2)
Hi there! Another good chapter! The plot is really good, full of twists and turns and I love it! Now, I'll jump right into this review. There are two sentences ...
Dec 13, 2018 -
Re: You Are The Chords On My Otherwise Unreadable Sheet Music
Hi there! This a really nice, amazing poem! I love the way you wrote this! It is a beautiful piece. Now, the only critiquing I have is that you need ...
Dec 11, 2018 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (8.2)
Hi there! So This is going to be a short review, as the person below me pretty much covered everything. :). This is another good chapter! There is one sentence ...
Dec 11, 2018 -
Re: Chapter 23.2: Ilami
Hi there! Interesting chapter!!! Now this is going to be short, so sorry about that. :). Now there is one sentence that could use a little work. First off: "Have ...
Dec 11, 2018 -
Re: Letters from an Unknown Writer
Hello! Sorry that it is late, but Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here. I am going to jump right into this review! First off, This is a ...
Dec 11, 2018 -
Re: First poem!!!!!!!!!
Hi there! I know it is late, but Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here, people are super helpful and nice here. Now, I'm going to jump straight ...
Dec 11, 2018 -
Re: Connection - 23
Perfect chapter! I cannot wait for more! Please let me know when you come out with the next chapter! This isn't going to be much of a review, because I ...
Dec 10, 2018 -
Re: Connection - 22
Another great chapter!! I totally love the "unexpected connections!" As before, there are a few tiny mistakes I would like to point out. " Kerra felt strangely devoid of the ...
Dec 10, 2018 -
Re: Connection - 21
Hi there!! Interesting chapter, loved the ending! Each one gets better and better! Now, I am going to jump right into this review. There are a few sentences that could ...
Dec 10, 2018 -
Re: Birds
This is beautiful!! I love it! You definitely have talent, and this poem tells so much! I have only one suggestion to make: "Under your wingspan we learnt to grow." ...
Dec 10, 2018 -
Re: Life or Death Chapter 2 Patrol
Hi there!! I loved this! It's getting exciting! I'm going to jump right into this review. The first sentence I noticed that needs a little work is this one: "The ...
Dec 7, 2018 -
Re: 15 Years Later...
Hi there! This is such a good story! Very heartwarming and touching! So most of what I noticed was that you don't have spaces between some words, usually at the ...
Dec 6, 2018 -
Re: Encroaching Death
Hi there! This is a really good poem! You have definitely got talent. I love how this poem is so understandable and easily felt. The last sentence felt a little ...
Dec 6, 2018 -
Re: Final Place
So beautiful and sad! It is so realistic and true though. I love how your poems are so striking! I think my favorite parts are these: "She lays in the ...
Dec 4, 2018
