Feltrix

This is a really interesting and well-written piece. I'm going to echo some of the stuff other people have said. Seekingthetruth is right; this feels more like the start of ...

Hey! This was a fun story! I'm mainly going to pick at one point here, and it's something that I totally understand if you want to ignore. I don't like ...

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Hello! A while ago, I said I'd review this. I don't know if you remember, but here I am now. Anyway, I'll start with what I think of the overarching ...

Hello! You may recall that I promised to review this a while ago, and I am finally doing it. I'm going to start with any problems I have in pacing, ...

Hello! I'm here to review. Of course. Why else would it say that I wrote a review? Anyway, here goes. I. Wondering. Endlessly wondering. It's always better to use the ...

Hello! Feltrix here for a review. Of course. Who else would I be and what else would I be here for with those bold letters above the post? Anyway... I. ...

Hello! I won't bother introducing myself or telling you why I'm here because you can see both of those things in the bold above this post. So. To business. I. ...

Hello! Feltrix here for a review! I. First off, in the first paragraph, things are a little abrupt, but I think that's okay for the most part. Still, you might ...

Hello, Sae! I'm here to review this chapter, which you can no doubt guess by the bold letters above. Anyway, I hope this is helpful. I. As he watched his ...

Hello, MJ! After all this time of you reviewing my work, I've finally stopped in to review one of yours. So, first of all, this prologue certainly leaves you wondering ...

I'm back. You've probably figure that out by now owing to the big text block and the large black and blue letters above. I. “Dragon's… Boxers… Split…” This seems like ...

Okay. I'm trying to finish reviewing this today, so there's no time for introductions. Also, I've used basically all of the introductions I can think of. I. Scientists don't really ...

I have returned for another review. I'm guessing this is pretty predictable by now and I'm running out of ideas for meaningless introductions. I. When Fox kills Alice (I'm pretty ...

Okay. Chapter five. No need for introductions. You know who I am. You know why I'm here. *Cracks knuckles.* Let's get to the review! I. “How did you guys get ...