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Wow Featherblue, all I can say is great job this poem is definitely one of the best short poems I've read so far! ' I let fantasy take me away, ...

Hi there, To the one who knows the heart of mine, Knows to live in peace and love divine. For in thine eyes you are more then treasure. - I ...

Hey there, This is a good attempt, so you're off to a good start :) ' You always know what to say to melt my heart and when Im mad ...

Hey there, First of all can I say I love your profile picture.. in motion. Very nice ! I quite liked this poem, but I suggest you use punctuations such ...

Hey retrodisco666, I really enjoyed this poem, it was touchy and there wasn't too much emotion included which I felt made the poem more strong as it wasn't needed. I ...

Great poem Undertaker! I like the fact that it is short and simple which makes it catchy. However, this sentence doesn't quite sound right to me: ' An exciting adventures ...

Hi EleanorRigby, I've got three words to describe what I think about this poem, 'Arw how nice.' This is so true, and I'm guessing you are relating a butterfly to ...

Great work at 14 years! Try to use punctuations such as commas and full-stops when writing your poems, this poem is sort of breathless when reading as it has no ...

I like what you wrote it can be easily related to and you're only 14! ' I ache to see you’re gorgeousness, To breathe in you’re calming smell, To feel ...

Hi Huthaifa, I quite like this poem, however I'd like to make a few suggestions; 'Am sorry for being like the flu, Hurting, disturbing and bothering you, Am sorry for ...

Wow, I really like this poem :) I can visualise what you are saying.. I adore the fact that parts of the poem can be related to personal experiences, such ...

Hi, I am guessing you are new at this as you have recently joined. First of all I would like to say welcome, and I hope you find that by ...

I really like this poem, however I will suggest a few changes. First off, you have barely used any punctuation, only full-stops. You should include more punctuation, commas, full stops, ...

This poem is pretty good, although I will suggest a few corrections to be made.. I'm not sure if you intended to go for some sort of rhyme, but the ...

Heyy, I really enjoyed your poem. The last few lines were catchy, and I thought they stood out the most.. 'I close my eyes, Thinking how sweet love is And ...