Published July 19, 2010
Knows to live in peace and love divine.
For in thine eyes you are more than treasure.
My love for you is too much to measure.
Within your eyes it seems so clear,
The way you love is so sincere.
You're like an angel but no surprise,
You are so beautiful in my eyes.
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I liked it! I like all of your poetry, actually to tell you the truth. KEEP IT UP! I'm going to follow you!
Hi there,

To the one who knows the heart of mine,
Knows to live in peace and love divine.
For in thine eyes you are more then treasure. - I think you meant to say 'than'
My love for you is too much to measure. - This stanza is very sweet and passionate!
Within your eyes it seems so clear,
That the way you love is so sincere. - I think it may sound better if you wrote ' The way you love is so sincere ' It sounds more well-rounded.
You're like an angel but no surprise,
You are so beautiful in my eyes.
I enjoyed this poem it's concise and passionate still.
Keep up the good work!
Your poem is so beautiful, i really enjoyed it.
Hey Fire and Ice.
I feel like I have read this poem before simply because it's got this spiel about love which is understandable. I just don't think you brought a part of you into the big ocean of love poems. I feel like this poem could be expanded upon. I liked the rhyming scheme and its cutesy nature. I also liked the way it was short and sweet.
Keep Writing.
Nice work on a form of poetry that's fairly unused nowadays

Just one or two things. I like the rhyme scale here, but have you considered switching it up a bit? It's AABB style, and that style can get a little stale-feeling sometimes. It's up to you of course, but I'd suggest maybe trying another draft with ABAB, or even AABA, and seeing which you prefer.
Also, the first "to" in the fourth line of stanza one should be a "too"
Nice work!