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As an English major in college, yes, I'm acquainted with the term "personification." ^~ I was just saying that the personification of shears as eager doesn't make sense in the ...

Well, for an acrostic, it's good. For a poem? You've done better.

o0. What's with the abuse of commas? And why are the linebreaks so arbitrary? Stop listing--start expressing. And please, steer clear of cliches like a cold wind withering the flowers!

I don't think it's a matter of personal preference about the length--it's a matter of this poem, as I said before, tripping all over itself. Newborn Bambi's got nothing on ...

That pose feels so good! ^^ I haven't ridden in far too long, too... you've made me simultaneously want to go home and do yoga, and go find a good ...

I agree with the above. If I was grading this, you would have gotten not a failing mark--but certainly a very low one.

Not half bad--but not nonfiction. ^~ If you expressly tell us that it's fictional in the beginning, why is it in this section, hm? Also--there's a typo in the title. ...

I really love this--but I'm afraid it barely qualifies as poetry in my mind. A gorgeous sentiment, perfectly expressed... but not verse.

I agree with Bubbles. Lose the acrostic style and clean up the meaning, and this has potential. Not much more to add, really--though I'll admit, I rather liked the last ...

Thanks, Imp, Myth, and Twit! And Twit--there was no duel or prompt for this one; they're characters I'm developing for a novel, so I'm using freewrites to really sound out ...

Okay. Well, if your aim was to make me pity you--you succeeded. Not in the way you probably intended, though. Do what whence and something_euclidean suggest. And then don't pick ...

I agree with Clau; it's too specific, and yet too far separated from the reader. What are we supposed to take from it? It's like a very vague, abbreviated character ...

Gummy: Thanks! It's not supposed to flow quite perfectly, though; as Clau mentions, it's got a jumpy--or as I prefer, distracted--feel. The speaker's the quintessential bureaucrat, after all, with far

^^ Thanks, Tony. There is a play on jingle in here, juxtaposing the word's links to both money and advertising; maybe I need to clarify that? Anyway, that's where the ...

Well, it was amusing, and I liked the message you were trying to convey. The rhythm was way off, though, and I felt like you could do a lot more ...