Fabien

I'd think of this piece as other fiction, but I'd like to say that I rather enjoyed it. I like the subjects you touched on and the piece as a ...

I liked this poem with its quadruple line rhyme. I thought "I might even send you a piggy in a crate" was rather good, it made me chuckle. Yes, it's ...

I thought that this excerpt was the best bit by far! "Eat your mushrooms, eat your mushrooms! However alien-seeming they be! For their caps are filled with flamingos And the ...

Your title should read "The Devil's Walk" you've forgotten the apostrophe. In the opening paragraph, "The Words were embossed...", the 'W' should be lowercase. In your second paragraph, " I ...

1. We go to the party with a present and have a jolly good time even if it is a bit crap. 2. We go to the party without a ...

Well, well, well, this story is intriguing. Why haven't I decided to read it till now? And I'm only at the beginning! I like the development of your characters and ...

I liked this, it caught my eye. I didn't like the first part in the the way that I didn't like the old man [not your work though]. It was ...

You know critiques are all opinion, right? Don't change your piece to please others, just change it or leave it be to please yourself. When I first read this, it ...

I really enjoyed this piece. It was real refreshing and I like how you went about it with the style and the rhyming. I feel poems like these could be ...

So, nice idea, it sure took a sharp turn. Your line structure is off, I hit a lot of potholes and it was rather bumpy. You need commas in there ...

So this piece was to the point, it shows that you miss him, but that in itself is a little cliche. Maybe if you expressed why you missed him it ...

I loved the overall feel of this piece. Its has unique content, unique subjects, like the aspect of the single wilted lily, I've never come across that before. It was ...

Hello, this was one of the first dozen poems that I read on this website, and I want you to know that I thoroughly enjoyed it then and even more ...

Yep, as the others before, this was fantastic! There aren't many 'lyrics' around here that I've read where I can actually imagine being songs, I read it twice over and ...

It feels like my chest is caving in, my ribs are pressing against my vital organs, I struggle to draw in breaths, they're drawn in ragged and exhaled in a ...