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I really like this! But I think that the story in general is kind of scaring though.. It makes me wonder what you really dream about when you're asleep in ...

It's not bad; But the chorus seems kind of irritating as was stated before. I would suggest revising also... But keep up the work.

I agree, but other then that it was really great; I hope to read more of your lyrics

This is a very good poem. I liked it how as they said before you can kind of walk down the street and sing this. GREAT JOB!

they have a point, don't make the words bold or put symbols. But good poem anyways

ok, I'll keep that in mind. Thanks for the constructive critisism :P

thx 4 the constructive critisism. It WAS froces ryhming because it's sum gay english thing Ang it was supposed to be a humersitic metaphor Anywayz, ya

thx for the advice ! I love ya too!!*hugs* OMG did u know that twenty minutes ago, I was looking at the plots of my stories and I discoverd that ...

it was really good!! It almost made me cry!! keep up the good work!! :)

it's nice!! Just one question. The words of this song sounds like it would be rock song. Is it a rock song? Anyways, i luv the part when you write ...

omg it was really good!! it sounded like it was from the heart. More poems should be like that; from the heart :D

Thx! the song is sang like a ballad but with a modern beat and twist. I try to encorperate the music with my vocal skills as much as possible to ...

Thanks for the advice, I'll try to fix it. Sorry about the grammar, i'm not english... But I'll try to find them.. thanks again

I really like it!1 and i agree with the post before me!

Your right about the three characters. The plot of the three girls, are sortas messed up. I was thinking that Amy should be those jealous girls that are really posessive, ...