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sunshine ( PLEASE read and comment )

by FaLlEn_AnGeL_13


Sunshine

Chorus

You were my sunshine, my only sunshine
You made me happy, my skys are grey
You'll never notice how much I love you
So please don't take my sunshine away

Verse 1

You could break my jeans boy but don't break my heart
The times that I think of you are tearing me apart
It's been to long since you walked out of that door
I told you to leave!1 Your not welcome anymore!!
I saw that girl that you were sleeping with today
I couldn't stand seeing her head were mine once layed
My friends told me to move on you could do better
But all I want I want is the original

Chorus

Verse 2

Now I know that you ain't never comming back
I can't beleive I was the one stabbed in the back
But there's only one thing I've got to say to you
I wish I'd never even layed my eyes on you
But there, shouldn't be regrets
Just forgive and forget
You ain't gonna be in my life all the time
You're the one that commited the crime

Chorus

Bridge

Number one: I don't need you in my life
that's what you made me think
Number two: I think I might still me in love with you
Why are you making my nights soo cold
Number three: Don't act like you don't feel the same
Cause I know you do
Number four: I'm jeanlous of every girl that's heled you
Cuz they've heled my sinshine

Chorus


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Mon Jan 30, 2006 9:01 pm
FaLlEn_AnGeL_13 says...



Thx! the song is sang like a ballad but with a modern beat and twist. I try to encorperate the music with my vocal skills as much as possible to show that if you want a good song, it needs to be sang by a singer that can actually sing and not like those lipsingers that are out on the main stream now. I won't say any names... but we all kno who they are...... lol




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Mon Jan 30, 2006 2:20 pm
Empress Kat says...



awesome. I'm not a fan of the chorus though... but depending ont he music it may work.
But over all, I like it a lot. Good job.




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Mon Jan 30, 2006 1:18 pm
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hey!!

its sooooooooooooo soooooooooooo sooooooooooo good! save that for english class too! 4+++ lol wow im speechless! keep up the good work :wink: :D





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