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Very good. I liked the second stanza. Your bright blue eyes, now a crimson red. Your innocent face, now a murderous stare. Your wondrous joys, now deceitful lies. Oh! So ...

Very well written. I cannot find any flaws with this piece. The lines didn't trip over themselves, the rhythm was appealing, and you just made sense! My favorite part: catching ...

This is a cool, powerful poem No one can see me For who I really am In the dark is where I be Hidden by the judging, damn I think ...

yay! first to review! Very good theme, but I think you should look at the rhythm. Sometimes it trips over itself, you should ad nothing words or take away nothing ...

It's not good for you to hold in so much emotion, especially in poetry. Let it out. You didn't say why your world was crashing down, you didn't say really ...

Hi Chicka Bee! OK, The first thing I have to ask you is, Are you feeling alright? You said that you had never written about experiences before. Was this an ...

This reminds me of that one poem, Annabell Lee. It truly is beautiful. I definitely liked it. You might want to consider publishing it. If you do, tweak the layout ...

No, no, rlw92, I don't think that's what it was about at all. I think, if you will forgive me if I am incorrect, saily.kiwalkar, that this poem is more ...

That was beautiful. I do not know if I can accurately say anything about this powerful poem Another day dawns. Halogen hemisphere, polishing the grass-blades until they throw light around ...

Sweet, no one worth mentioning would take a chainsaw to something you wrote from the bottom of your heart. You did a fine job describing life's futility and rebirth, the ...

Ahhh... Music to my ears :smt020 Your poem captures the warmth and peace of summer I especially like the first two lines. The imagery here is amazing I didn't understand ...

Noncence freakling ruules. aWesomme. $$$$ WEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!! :elephant: Keep it up or the ruler of the universe will be displeaced. we dont want Thaaaaaaat, do wee? Good. now keep beeen cannfusing ...

It is beautiful. I hate to say that any work needs work, because we put so much into the original copy, but some of the things I read were incorrect. ...

:wink: Don't worry about conventions. I don't think they're neccesary in this particular peice of poetry. Perfect punctuation pleases people, but imperfect intuitiveness is interesting. I insist, insp

I Love It I love it I LOVE it! I read them all!!! Keep writing them!!! this is gonna turn steamy isn't it! I can sence it!!! Wow! OK. Now ...