Explosive_Pen

Hello! I liked the message your poem was trying to portray. The pain we all feel inside but hate to acknowledge. However, I thought that the flow of it was ...

I have a few issues with it: "Badgering encouragement" How can encouragement be badgering? Unless it's too much encouragement.... I guess I just have issues with that line. "The place ...

Very very very good. I did notice a few grammar mistakes (like, one or two), but I lost track of them while reading, and I'm too lazy to go back ...

Hmm. I like it. It's sort of like a little revolution of happiness, but then it was subdued, but you never know when it'll happen again. It made me smile ...

Once again, your work has caught my eye. I must say, you're a very good writer. However, I'm confused about the "blue-and-pink line". Try as I might, I just can't ...

I liked it. Did you know cul de sac is Latin for "Bottom of the bag"? I like how you mix in the italicized lines. It really draws your eye ...

Haha, what can I say? Springrain2693 basically pointed out most of the faults, and a few unnecessary ones at that. I found your poem to be a bit redundant and ...

I liked the message. How many times have I felt that way? Your stanzas were a bit choppy, and the rhythm was a little off. You should also work on ...

Wow, that's really beautiful. I'm guessing it's not really about the moon? Like the moon is symbolic of some lost love? Or is that just my own sappiness? Probably. Anyway, ...

Wow. I really liked it. The overall message is really powerful (for lack of a better word). I like your analogy of humans to gods; that we applaud them for ...

Wow. It's very deep and sad, but I really liked it. I love how the rhyme seems to come so naturally, and how it doesn't seem forced, like it sometimes ...

[quote=clueless]Small as a drop of rain. Rain, sparkling below[/quote] The repetition of rain is a bit, er tacky? For lack of a better word.... But I like the whole bird's ...

I liked it, though I must agree that it is a bit gross. The line (or part of a line, at least), "My desperate darling," is a bit odd. You ...