ExOmelas

I was sort of trundling through this poem because it's review day but I got to the last line and nearly shouted 'Oh!' out loud. I'm going to read this ...

I love semi-colons! I read about their grammatical use in second year (which is roughly 8th grade I think) and ever since then I feel so happy when I know ...

Hello there. Just to let you know, I don't normally review poetry but I saw the title of this and jumped at it. If I hear one more word about ...

'He longed for the moment he’s going to work alone.' - he's' should be 'he was'. 'The giant city filling even larger hole inside the mountain was down under.' either ...

'He had to run; for life had brought' - this should be a comma not a semi-colon. Semi-colons can only be used if the clauses on either side could stand ...

'located in Edinburg' - it's 'Endinburgh'. Just pronounce it as 'Edin-bur-ge-he' when you're trying to spell it. 'Also, the forest was a pretty moist place' - something about that 'also' ...

I do not understand what happened in this sentence: 'I am tan I know what you’re thinking, no not grocery money, tackle'. The rest of this paragraph is absolutely beautiful. ...

'"That's silly," thought Kerry' - I think this should be in italics rather than in speech marks. I'm loving it by the way. 'that she was wrong; that she could ...

'moving his hips in a circular formation' - I think it should be 'motion' rather than 'formation'. That is literally my only nitpick. The humour in this is perfect. The ...

“Charlie maybe you should take the horses to the stable.” - there should be a comma after 'Charlie'. 'It was unheard of, Nathaniel was largely untested as a knight' - ...

I don't think you've given yourself enough credit here. I think your characterisation in both versions was excellent and the relationship between Edrich and his mother was very realistic. I ...

"The sky was blue no clouds in sight" - you need a comma before 'no'. "The hills were like seas of grain" - do you mean green? You might not. ...

'It was complete success and became number one play on the chart in London.' - 'It was a complete success'. 'became the number one play'. 'become a movieso' - fairly ...

I'm a nerd and I love being a nerd and it's pretty much my entire existence - BUT - I also love to play tennis and hockey and the popular ...

It's half-past midnight so this is going to be the grouchiest review ever. I apologise in advance. 'looked at herself on the mirror.' - in the mirror 'shinny dark-brown roots,' ...