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Hey Written! First of all, your avatar makes me giggle in its massive obviousness. Even when she smiled it was as though she were planning a way to rip out ...

Aloha! Shall be brief. One quick nitpick! seeing as how her husband might not come back from his mission alive, so she figured she would want to make Helena in ...

Whew! Finally here. I really need to stop promising people reviews right before exams. I'm going to go detailed on you to hopefully give you some writing-stye advice. Also, I've ...

Hey! I'm so sorry this is so unforgivably late. *cringes* I'm here now! And I deleted three of the four reviews before me, since they were duplicates. Firstly, I'm obligated ...

Hey CBF, here as you so adorably begged! :) I'll take $100,000,000 upfront, please; you can pay the other half later. *nods* Actually, I'm facing the same dilemma as everyone ...

I agree with everything Meep said! Additionally, "denim blue eyes" is a weird image, since denim can be different shades of blue and is generally very grainy. And he comes ...

*Locked* Since YWS's and COPA 's policy is to not allow writers under 11 to join, this author was banned and therefore critiques probably aren't going to do them much ...

Hey Regan! Sorry this has taken so long. You've gotten some excellent critiques already, though, and I suggest you heed all of their suggestions. The second thing she realized was ...

Here as requested! Upon reading the spoiler, the first thing that I thought was: The Hunger Games. The whole, "Random people thrown together in a game who have to kill ...

Hey kaka! :D I'm terribly sorry that this review is so late. School has been crazy. Life was a reality and nothing nor anyone could change that Life was a ...

Hey Gabriella! You know that you don't have to post a new thread with each edit, right? xD There's an "edit" button in the upper-right-hand corner where you can make ...

So you do write! :D I thought this was cute. It's well-written. The dialogue is realistic. But it's also kind of boring and, at times, a lot of the conversations ...

Hey Zekkie! This will be short. You have some nice description in that first paragraph, especially of Mr. McFinnigan, but I'd cut that paragraph in half once you start talking ...

Hey jDawn! I thought this was pretty dry. The contest is about description of the inanimate object, but I don't feel like the basket was described; there is no clear ...

Hey! Cool poem idea here. I’m writing a story where the underlying theme is all about fire and its combination of being beautiful and deadly, so it was interesting to ...