Evangelina

Thanks, Mist. Yeah...it's just describing a plant clinging to life on a road...but I can see how it would be prosey.

I edited in the rest of the chapter!

I LOVED THIS BOOK TOO!

Haha thanks. Actually I was looking a pic on Flickr for inspiration, and a weed/flower thing by the roadside popped up.

Thanks so much! Yea, looking back I noticed how many asides I used...it's frightening. I'll work on it...I always have the most trouble starting a novel.

It seems a little bit plain, to me. It has a saddness that should be brought to life even more. It's pretty good, but could be better with less cliche, ...

Thanks Well!

Thanks Gin!

Thanks, Col! I'll definetly work on it.

WOW! Snoink, you really blew me away! That was terribly sad, and I wanted to beat the mum over the head with a fish. I'll be looking for more of ...

It was very sweet, very emotional. It is a bit messy, but nothing but a bit of work could fix it.

Thanks, Kyte!

Oooh! One of the best poems I've seen so far! This is really great Kyle, I'll come back with something, but for now, it's very very good!

It's too raw for me. It's very on the edge, and I can feel the emotion, but it's too sharp. A poem shouldn't just tell me things, it should sing ...

Thanks Gin!